PJM CATEGORY REVIEWS

@chloesmith chloesmith
Book: Reverie
Title : 3 marks
Cover: 3 marks
Description : 7.5 marks
Prologue/1st chapter: 4 marks
Plot : 17 marks
Flow : 12 marks
Emotions : 7 marks
Grammar /vocabulary: 12 marks
Creation : 4 marks
Dialogue: 3 marks
Overall : 3 marks
Total : 75.5/100
Review: I'll be honest with you, I didn't get your storyline, no matter how many chapters I read. It was a bit too plain and not explained properly. Look, having your own unique plot is the best part but sometimes, if the plot is not very well explained or very plain with no spice here and there, it won't bring out the appeal. The same was the case with your work, it wasn't too appealing. The cover is another dilapidated mess. I think it's too over the top for a reader. Keeping things simple, first start off by using a fresh face claim and don't add extravagant effects to the font, it kills interest. No grammatical mistakes were found but the chapters were too short for my liking at least and weren't that information as well. I see that you tried to create suspense but that too came off way too poor and pushy, getting me disinterested. Try on working a bit more on your writing skills, the rest will all fall into place as there is a little description of scenes as of now.

@Avril_young Avril_young
Book: Stay with me: 
Title: 3 marks
Cover: 3 marks
Description: 7 marks
Prologue/1st chapter: 2 marks
Plot: 16 marks
Flow: 12 marks
Emotions: 7 marks
Grammar/vocabulary: 12.5 marks
Creation: 3 marks
Dialogue: 2 marks
Overall: 3 marks
Total: 70.5/100
Review: The title and cover are plain, not enough to attract a reader. Now, I personally want to point out the flow of your book. How come the OC and Jimin get so well acquainted in the first chapter itself? Where is the character development? Where is the drama and why is everything so pushy to the point where your book looks like a summary of some already published work? There was zero character development and had there been a specific section for it, you'd have lost much more marks. It really irked me to see everything happening with the speed of light, everything was rushed. There's a witch and she turns guys into insects and they are all okay with it? Aren't humans supposed to be scared of such events? The originality again was eaten up here. I really don't think any human in their right mind would be amazed to see their friend transforming into a mole and then back to human again. That's really out of place, it's not the Harry Potter world nor an HP fanfic. People look for sensible things to read, at least I do so I really found your work quite irksome. It totally was, but as it's your story, your plan so I won't say you must edit some initial chapters and scenes but if you want to present your readers with something worth remembering, that's advisable.

Judge: @rabisworld2
Book: Still you
Author: @missemle missemle
Title: 4/5 
Cover: 4/5
Blurb: 5/10
First impression: 4/5
Plot: 17/20
Flow: 9/15
Emotions: 8/10
Grammar and punctuation: 12/15
Creativity: 4/5
Dialogues: 4/5
Overall: 4/5
Total: 75/100
Review: Let's start from, the blurb or better say description. It sounded confusing to me. Let me be honest, it was neither eye-catching nor it was interesting. Surely, it spiked my interest a bit to know what's the story is like but better say, it was not good enough. It will be more interesting if you can add some interesting dialogues or better say some interesting scenes in that as well. It's my thinking and suggestion. The book cover was good. But I would like to say that you can make Jimin and the girl's picture a bit bigger. Otherwise, it is good. Let's come forward to 1st impression. It was good. I felt relaxed and somehow calm by reading this. A good job is done here. But I can't say the same about the plot. Sure, the plot is unique as you have added many elements to it to make it appealing but I will cover the story alone as well as the characters and pace. The pace was too slow which is not liked by many. What I meant to say is you should keep a balance. Sometimes, it felt very slow to the point, it was hard for me to read. But sometimes you managed to keep it good. About characters, I would like to say, you did quite a good job in describing them. They were explained in detail and their mentality, as well as their behaviour, was balanced. About grammar and vocabulary as well as punctuation so you did make mistakes in tenses sometimes, as well as punctuation was not placed well. For vocabulary, you used big and compound sentences for which I would suggest you use to sort and make easy ones. I hope you can consider the points explains above and not take them to heart. You have the potential to be known as a writer.

@cascading_blues cascading_blues

Useless Wizard
BOOK TITLE [2/5]
BOOK COVER [3/5]
DESCRIPTION [3/10]
PROLOGUE (FIRST CHAPTER) [0/5]
PLOT [4/20]
CHAPTERS & FLOW [2/15]
EMOTIONS [2/10]
GRAMMAR & VOCABULARY [2/15]
CREATIONS [1/5]
DIALOGUE [1/5]
OVERALL [1/5]
TOTAL= 21/100

REVIEW: Jimin was called a useless wizard in the plot even though he hasn't done anything useless, so the title is irrelevant but it is attention-grabbing. The book cover is beautiful and eye-catching, the font style of the title suits the cover but I believe a different position would look much better. The font style for the author's name doesn't suit and the size is almost large as the title. The description is short and reveals little about the character's personality through the dialogue without any quotation mark. The blurb seems interesting but the writing style ruins the mood. Also, It didn't reveal anything about the plot. Moving on, the scene of the prologue was repeated 2 times, it was very confusing and the writing style isn't good. You give space before punctuations such as comma or exclamation marks. Instead of ellipsis, you use more than three dots at one time. You use parenthesis for the action tag or should I say you rarely wrote any action tag. Only dialogues that look like text messages without any paragraph for explanation or narration. Sometimes you didn't capitalize the first letter of anyone's name. their emotions aren't well-described or felt even through the dialogues. You need to work hard to improve your vocabulary and grammar too, there are many spelling mistakes too. Avoid using short forms and add question marks in interrogation dialogue. The plot wasn't interesting nor thrilling, you missed out on many important details to mention, they just took shelter in Y/N's house and the love triangle between Vmin. There is no creativity nor effort. I suggest working more hard in learning and writing. Read many famous fanfictions and stories you can to improve your skills.

Book Title: My Mr Runner
Author: @AlienboyfriendTae AlienboyfriendTae
Category: Park Jimin
BOOK TITLE [2/5]
BOOK COVER [2/5]
DESCRIPTION [9/10]
PROLOGUE (FIRST CHAPTER) [4/5]
PLOT [18/20]
CHAPTERS & FLOW [14/15]
EMOTIONS [9/10]
GRAMMAR & VOCABULARY [10/15]
CREATIONS [5/5]
DIALOGUE [4/5]
OVERALL [5/5]
TOTAL= 82/100
REVIEW: The title is simple, it doesn't sparkle any interest nor grab the attention but it matches the plot. The cover is simple too. It isn't very eye-catching and I suggest you add Author's name to avoid Plagiarism. The description show glimpse of their goofy personalities which attracts the readers and gain their attention for the story. The prologue is interesting and enjoyable but the pacing was a little fast. The plot seems rare in an interesting way, the main characters are pretty talented and have good chemistry between them. The flow of overall chapters is balanced, nothing is cliche nor fast or too slow. Your grammar is perfect but there are fewer vocabulary errors in early chapters like usage of helping verb, spelling mistakes and some missing words. Sometimes in interrogation dialogue, you forgot to add a question mark and wrote "said" instead of "asked" in the action tag and vice versa. Overall the story was great. I learned new things, especially when the character explained things during a race or swim and I really love the creativity of intriguing and humorous events or incidents along with the flow of the story. You described everything pretty well and emotions were well-delivered through your writing skills.

Reviewer: @Rabisworld2
Book: His dominant love
Author: @Jellycuddles19_ Jellycuddles19_
Blurb: ⅘ It was good and catchy enough. It spiked my interest up and I read it further. It has the ability to catch the reader's attention and has gained marks in this aspect.
 Cover:3/5 Regarding this, I think the font style for dominant words can be changed as well as its colour. The colour with this font is not suiting well. It is designed well but I personally think that the face claim has been Jimin's instead of that girl. What I meant to say is, it is good and Jimin is present on the cover, but his picture is small and not visible like a girl. I think his face should be visible and the girl's face should be hidden. However, the cover is good and attractive enough.
 Title: ⅖ About this, I would like to say that it is not attractive enough. What I meant to say is sure, it can attract people by its name which seems bossy and gives the vibes of a forced relationship story, however, the marks I cut the marks for the un-uniqueness of the title. There are many stories having this type of title or particularly this title. So it doesn't appear as a unique one to readers.
 1st impression: ⅗ Truth to be said, I expected so much from this. And to be honest, it didn't disappoint me much. It was good enough but somehow it felt boring. The way to start a story from anyone's POV is a technique not to be looked upon. Actually, most of the people out there on Wattpad didn't like the hero or heroine's POV at the very start of the story. You should use your point of view and can change it into any POV after a few sentences. However, I am still looking forward to this story and waiting as you may continue the story the way you like. But I hope you can consider this point.
Reader's interaction: 8/10 I can see many people voting and commenting on the story. Interacting with the characters and sharing their thoughts.
Plot: 6/10 At this point, the only marks you got is for a few elements you used in the book. Most of the stories of this type have the same cliche plotline and story execution. Where a male is a bad guy or forces the female lead into a marriage which also happens in this book. The only difference is that the male is not a mafia boy, the female doesn't owe him a debt to pay. But there are also a lot of stories where the female lead runs away and leaves her stepsister to get married which happens in this book as well. What I meant to say is, the only elements which made me curious to know were suspense as well as a desire to know what happened and why it happened. I continued reading to find out the secret behind Jimin's drunken state at his own wedding. Why was the female lead blamed? Even though these questions are not big enough but for me they were, there are also a lot of little matters in this book which makes it a bit prominent among the other stories. The second thing which makes it unique is the execution of the plot. It was well settled and well explained.

 Twist: 5/10 Well, there was not much to be called a twist. Sure, there were a few elements to spice the interest of readers up but they will not be counted as twists. I am looking forward to a big and major twist in this story which I hope will be brought out soon.
Emotions: 8/10 This is a factor I would like to talk about. You did a good job in handling them. I felt my anger boiling and sometimes little smiles. However, at some point, I didn't feel any. I hope you can make it work.
 Grammar: 7/10 You are fair enough in this sector but still you need improvement in your grammar as well as the use of phrases. You used long sentences at some points which are so long exactly. Use short sentences, little paragraphs as well as sentence structure. Hope you can work it off.
 Character development: 8/10 It can be seen all through the story. I liked the way you told us the characters and showed us their behaviour. It was no secret as to what's going on in the character's minds and what they are thinking or feeling. Good job is done here.
 Writing style: 8/10 This is the thing which I liked most. You executed the plot well and told us everything in detail. You just need a gee improvement and add a few major elements in the story to make it more unique. I liked your writing style as it dealt with the characters, emotions and plot and made everything visible to us. Good job.
 Overall: 8/10
Total: 70/100