Book: Cold Sweetheart
Author: ProdigiousFlames
Genre: Fanfiction

Cover: 75/100
First off, your cover isn't bad, it's just very, very plain, and doesn't really relate to your title. I would recommend changing some aspects of it, like perhaps adding some icy elements or something to tie to your title, and having your character take up a bigger portion of the cover, not just inside a little shape. Don't be afrid to really add mind-grabbing aspects to your cover! I loved the font for your title, though, and the quote at the bottom is quite interesting.

Blurb: 80/100
Again, not bad, just kind of vague. Starting your blurb with quotes is actually a pretty interesting idea, but I might get rid of the final quote since Ashish Verma isn't mentioned in the blurb. Your blurb is short, something that I am a big fan of, and it evokes curiosity, but I think your blurb should ellaborate a little more on the plot of the story. What you've written is written fairly well, just make sure to watch out for tense inconsistencies, and make sure to adjust word choice and comma usage to allow it flow a little better.
I've edited it to give you an idea:

"Being cold-hearted in this world seems fair."
-Pallavi Deshmukh

"It hurts when you have someone in your heart, but can't have them in your arms."
-Raghav Rao

Nobody dares mess with Pallavi Deshmukh, the most wanted bachelorette in India. She's known worldwide for her equisite beauty, but it's too bad that her heart is frozen... and it's impossible to melt.

Raghav Rao is the Don of Hyderabad and women swoon at the mere sight of him. However, nobody can get close to him since he despises the sight of women. But all that changes when he falls for a woman that despises the very existence of love.

She was his "Cold Sweetheart."

Can he melt her frozen heart before it's too late? Or will his his heart get broken in the process?

First Impressions: 70/100

Dialogue:
Right off the bat, I see a lot of issues within your dialogue, whether it be ending it with the wrong punctuation, or adding a misplaced space before or after a quotation mark.

Example 1: Ashish was enraged. " It's good that I love Anjali now... I am happy that I got to know your true colors." He spat, yet...

Fixed: Ashish was enraged. "It's good that I love Anjali now... I'm happy that I learned your true colors," He spat, yet...

When you begin a string of dialogue, the quotation mark is always touching the first word. Though the extra space isn't a big deal, it makes your work look a little sloppy, which will cause a lot of picky readers to shy away. Another mistake is your period after Ashish' dialogue. If dialogue ends in a word such as said, told, explained, spat, etc. (basically any word describing the act of speaking) the sentence isn't over, so therefore you don't end their dialogue with a period, rather a comma. If the dialogue ends with a question/exclamation mark, that rule doesn't apply, but remember that the he/she said after the dialogue will begin with a lowercase since the sentence hasn't ended.

I'm also taking advantage of this example to point out your tendency to write extremely wordy sentences. It's not so bad to have all these extra words in the regular writing, but when writing dialogue, it's best to keep your sentences extra short, because it makes for more interesting dialogue, and you can read it quickly and get on with the story. Most readers don't like reading dialogue, they just want to get on with the story, and that's my reasoning behind that. It also better imitates the way that real people speak. You have super, super long dialogue, which you don't want to be the main part fo your story. Consider simplifying a lot of it. Here's a few more examples which need some major work:

Original: Pallavi's eyes hardened hearing the word. " You think that I will steal him away from you ? Oh sweetie, what does he have that I will steal him away ?"

Fixed: Pallavi's eyes narrowed at the last word. "You think that I want to take him away from you? Oh, sweetie, what does he have that I'd even want?"

I'm not quite sure why you put an extra space before your ? but make sure to fix that. In the above example, there is also a lot of repitition within your dialogue, something that you should try to avoid. A lot of your dialogue needs rewording because it's very lengthy and all over the place.
Example: Ashish started when Pallavi cut him off, "Please take you fiancee with you and get out." She spoke and Ashish pleaded, " She is not my fiancee, Pallavi . I love only you and no one else. It's okay if I get insulted by you. I don't mind."

Fixed:

"Pallu-" Ashish started to speak, but Pallavi cut him off.

"Please take your fiancee with you and get out," she said.

"She's not my fiancee, Pallavi," he pleaded, "I love you and only you. It's okay if you insult me, I don't mind."

Another correction you need to make is starting a new paragraph when someone new speaks. If you don't, it creates a giant run on jumble and you can't make out who is saying what. And also rememeber that you don't have to end every string of dialogue with a speech-action word, you can also just have dialogue and an action showing the way that they feel instead of saying that they said it in a certain way.

Example: Pallavi rolled her eyes in frustration and shouted, " Can't you hear me ? I said get out." Seeing him not moving, she called out, "Brandon."

Fixed: Pallavi rolled her eyes in frustration. "Can't you hear me? I said get out!" He still didn't move. "Brandon!" A burly man, one of Palavi's bodygaurds, came to her side immediately. "Don't you think they're annoying, Brandon?"

See? I didn't use a single speech word in my fixed example, and you don't have to either. Use actions to explain speech, not just said. Wattpad has many, many, many great guidebooks to writing dialogue, and I definitely reccomend that you check out some of these to improve your writing. Also, I'd reccomend getting someone else to proofread/edit your story. They can help you improve the over-wordiness and the inconsistencies.

Contractions:
No offense to you or anyone else, but I can't stand reading a story that's written without contractions. Contractions are combined words such as can't (can not), that take the place of the longer words, and make for a much smoother reading experience. I beg you, use contractions whenever you can, of course there are exceptions where you want it to sound formal, but most of the time changing I am to I'm makes reader so much happier.

Tense:
Make sure that your tense remains the same throughout your story, because that very much disrupts the flow as well.

Example: All of them felt awe for the woman in front of them. She is so cold towards them, but she is still better than any other CEO.
Fixed: All of them were in awe of the woman before them. She was so cold towards them, but still the greatest CEO.

In the above example, you literally go from past tense to present over the course of two sentences. Your story is written in past tense, so inconsistencies like these really throw off the flow. Make sure to proofread extra hard for these little inconsistencies. And again, you have a tendency to be over-wordy. Look at the fixed example above. I used fewer words, but I still got the meaning across and the entire sentence flows better.

Other Issues:
Proofread!!! You have lots and lots of typos and unneeded spaces! It makes your story look kind of sloppy, and will absolutely ruin readers' experiences with your story!

Further Analysis: (70/100)
You told me in your comment not to sugarcoat, and so far I really haven't, but your actual story is pretty rough. You also asked me to read all the story parts, but I was running a little low on time because of my own procrastination, so I only read two.

My first issue is that the dialogue is very, very long. Like I mentioned above, you don't want dialogue to be the only aspect of your story, and in the first chapter it seems like all it is is dialogue. Try to add more action to your story, and not just have the characters talking the entire time.

My second issue is with the actual plot itself. It is very, very, very all over the place. The same characters are present in all three scenes in these chapters, and it feels like the same things are happening. They're arguing, and Ashish is being whiney and begging for some woman's attention. Anjali is being evil and conniving, while Pallavi is being emotionless. I'd really like to see some more character development, not just them being hateful all the time. This seems very much like a soap opera, which may or may not be your intention, but the drama gets a bit boring. And then at the awards ceremony with the Mafia thing, I had absolutely zero idea what was going on until I read it like three times. Your writing is very muddled, and you need to really elaborate on events because you have a tendency to just write simple actions then get carried away with dialogue.

Your transitions of events also kind of get lost within your many words, so I suggest solidifying a plotline, really deciding which aspects to keep, and writing another draft slowly, finding ways to put your events together, not just go from one random scene to another. Again, remember my advice about the guidebooks. Really sit down, take notes, and work to improve your writing.

Final Notes: 70/100
I saw on your message board that you may or may not be active on Wattpad at the moment, and until 2023, so I'm sorry if you don't get to read this review before you leave. I just want to tell you that you have writing potential, just a long way to go. Try to apply all of my tips above, and request more reviews from other communities that may be able to elaborate on the aspects I missed. The most important thing is to keep writing and practicing.

I enjoyed reading and reviewing your story! And thanks for choosing me as your reviewer!

-Cyprus