Greetings. I am JoSebach: I've been writing, reading and reviewing fanfictions as a hobby for several years by now. I discovered the Demons of Wattpad's existence just a couple years ago by chance and I couldn't help but gather all the guts I could and ask them to join their team. It's a pleasure to meet you all! This will be the translation of my own first review for the Demons. I hope my English won't disappoint you readers: whenever you find some mistakes or typos, feel free to inform me.

But enough with formalities and let's scrape a corner from the bottom of this dark barrel. It's about average, but not less disturbing.
Today we're going to talk about "Stalker [H.S] ➣ Daddy!Kink", written by bambigirl23.
Its ten-thousand-word-long content, split in thirteen chapters, has been viewed more than 353 thousand times. The summary states:

Lauryn is a nieve girl, with her skater skirts and knee socks. At only 16 years
old she doesn't know what the world holds, the people it holds, the crazy things it holds. When her life is flipped up side down by her insane and might I add attractive stalker what happens?

Jokes aside, I can guarantee you in this work, if anything, there is no grain of logic, both plot-wise and character-wise.

The story starts in December with Lauryn, our likable main character who, as this type of female protagonists we've learned to get familiar with, is transgressive and believes to be neglected from parental care. Wearing her boots, she leaves her home to meet Keegan, her unknown-year-old boyfriend, for an appointment in the «mall downtown». On her way, she happens to collide with a brick wall that is immediately revealed to be Harry, a very tall stranger she also defines «the quite attractive man I might add», despite in that exact moment Harry is harshly scolding her for hitting him.
With a change of point of view, we find out, thought, that he got in her way on purpose, as he apparently knows everything about her and he couldn't resist getting closer to her, pleased to see her submissive reaction.
Anyway, she resumes her walk, uneasy while having the impression of «several sets of eyes watching» her, which are actually Harry's and his cronies'.

With no further incidents she meets up with Keegan in the mall. As he bids her with a «Hey babe» she thinks, quote (Lauryn POV):

Sometimes I wish he would say nicer things, like 'hi beautiful' or anything besides just saying I was hot.

I beg of you to keep in mind this little detail, since the protagonist will readily forget about it, alongside thousands other things on the way.

Suddenly a girl (who?) screams and Keegan goes for the rescue despite Lauryn's protests. It's funny how in a mall during December apparently only the protagonist and her boyfriend hear somebody's cry. Also, the subtlety the author uses to describe the settings, I'm speechless. Quote (Lauryn POV):

He doesn't even listen he just runs through the streets of downtown London, England to the ally where the scream came from.

Evgenij:- Add the postcode and there is everything. At least, though, this time the setting is made known (unlike in more popular fanfictions, i.e. "Dark").-

Anyway she follows him and reaches him. Quote (Lauryn POV):

Chasing after Keegan to the ally way, I see a girl on the ground in a pool of blood. Probably dead, my heart falls as I see the girl there, I think I might faint. until I see Keegan pressed against a wall with five very tall and very attractive boys around him.

They're bad boys, yes, but attractive, too. I'm glad you've got your priorities straight, Lauryn! Some guys are blocking your boyfriend with their muscles while stopping you thanks to their... charm? Really, how can she just zone out like this? Quote (Lauryn POV):

In that split second I was going to tell them to put him down but the boy with the blonde hair, pulls out a gun and shots Keegan right through the head.

"No!" I scream as I see my boyfriends eyes role to the back of his head as the drop him to the ground.

By the way yes, Niall shots Keegan, now dead. Let's remember him which a minute of silence.

Evgenij:- No, they killed him!-
Fanwriter91:- Those bastards!-

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- JoSeBach