Book name: Strong (One Piece x Reader)
Fandom: One Piece
Genre: Fluff, Romance, Reverse Harem
Author: Animefreak1145
POV: Second person view
Content: 85 chapters
Status: Ongoing

Remarks: "I just want an in depth explanation of my first One Piece story. Although I originally wrote this for fun, and is therefore a simple formatted story, I would like to try to improve and heed to my readers wants."

- Gs-chan

A) Cover - C- (6.9)
...1) Image [ C- ]
...2) Font [ C+ ]
...3) Color scheme [ A- ]
...4) Resolution [ A+ ]
...5) Implicative Aspect [ E ]
...6) Impact [ F ]
...7) Meaning [ B+ ]

B) Description - A- (9.2)
...1) Style [ A+ ]
...2) Relevance [ A+ ]
...3) Mysticism [ B ]
...4) Neatness [ A+ ]

C) Storyline - D (6.1)
...1) Chapter length [ C+ ]
...2) Prioritization [ C+ ]
...3) Spotlights [ D ]
...4) Composition/Style [ E ]
...5) Presence of Plotline [ B- ]
...6) Originality [ F ]
...7) Efficiency [ F ]

D) Characters - C- (6.4)
...1) Accuracy [ B ]
...2) Description [ F ]
......a) Style
......b) Vividness
......c) Impact
......d) Originality (only OC characters)
...3) Presence [ B ]
......1) Scene distribution
......2) Contribution to story

E) Dialogue - B- (7.9)
...1) Accuracy [ A+ ]
...2) Density/Weight [ B+ ]
...3) Language [ A+ ]
...4) Richness [ E ]
......a) Description of actions
......b) Linear to scene
......c) Creativity
...5) Length [ D ]
...6) Delivery [ C- ]
...7) Neatness [ A+ ]

F) Setting - F (3.5)
...1) Direction [ F ]
...2) Number of locations [ F ]
...3) Vividness [ F ]
...4) Scenario [ E ]
...5) Names [ E ]
......a) Locations
......b) Characters
......c) Others

G) Technicals - B+ (8.5)
...1) Errors [ A+ ]
......a) Grammar
......b) Punctuation
......c) Typo
...2) Arrangement [ A+ ]
...3) Encapsulation of idea [ A+ ]
...4) Mood [ C- ]
...5) Book title [ B ]
...6) Genre relevance and accuracy [ C+ ]

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Verdict :

Book rating: 6.9/10.0 (F)

Potential: 89%

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A) Cover
I'll get straight to the point on this one. I know that you really, really want to put all that guys all together, and it's fine don't worry haha. Honestly, it's quite simple and comic book-like so I don't really have complaints. Although I would have preferred that the font style was better, lol. It's a good cover, but if you want to get more readers, who have to do more than what cover you have right now. Knowing the community here in Wattpad, books get viewed more when they have an attractive cover xD

So, I made you one :) Just tell me if you want it.

B) Description
It was pretty simple and short, so I can't say much about it technically. But in a way it was mystifying or I should better call it as interesting. But why don't you try making it a little more longer, more detailed?

C) Storyline
I'll tell you the good stuff about the storyline before I tell you about the loopholes. Strong is a pretty good book in the sense that it has both plot line and story. It's incredibly rare for me to find a fanfic that has a number of chapters like your self that makes sense, the other fanfics I've managed to take a peek of were nothing but garbage and nonsense really. The story's got conflict, and yeah, a story basically.

However, it's too slow paced and sometimes the plot sequencing is too fast and does not make sense. Like, the story may be lengthy, but the plot development is too fast. It really gets me confused about what's going on. You need to also add a little more impact and a bit more of a story. The character development is a little bit too fast yet slow-paced as well, which means the story could be long, and I can't recognize the development between the characters. Also, I don't actually feel the romance between Y/N and the boys, so you better fix that part.

D) Characters
The characters don't make sense to me honestly. I get really confused and the OC's personality because it keeps going back and forth from serious, to sadistic, to kind, etc. You have to make sure her personality is solid, otherwise people like myself would get really confused. The characters themselves lack impact and presence, thus I couldn't develop a fondness for any of them; all I could say was, "Ah okay." You wouldn't want your readers saying that. And, I would prefer it if you could describe each and every one of your characters. I know that it's a fanfic and that everyone should be familiar with the characters, but it's nice to make things more colorful, wouldn't you agree? I actually don't watch One Piece so I am not familiar with any of the characters at all, except for Luffy—the guy with the straw hat.

As for the original characters of the anime, I never watched the anime so I am not familiar on the characters' personality.

E) Dialogue
I have no problem with the dialogues, mate! I guess I give it a thumbs up. I just don't know with the accuracy of the way the original characters from the anime are, you know I never watched One Piece—and I don't think I ever will. GOMENASAI. But the way the dialogues were delivered was done pretty well, it shows that you put some effort in the dialogues. Some people neglect the importance of the dialogues and they just simply put whatever is going on inside their brain, like seriously.

Anyways, good job :D

F) Setting
If you've read the previous review, the setting was a problem because it wasn't vivid enough to make me see what you want me to see. The same goes here, I just know the name of the place and I have to analyze and think where and how the place looks like, seeing that "Y/N" goes from one place to another. Naming the place is one thing, but showing your readers is different. I honestly prefer books that are vivid, being the kind of writer I am, so I am encouraging you to be a little more vivid if you could help it.

I can't imagine the scenarios either; I can't see what's going on. The only thing being described are the thoughts in Y/N's head.

G) Technicals
In terms of the technical issues, there's practically none. There wasn't any wrong grammar, spelling. Although I honestly didn't finish the book, gomen. Eighty-plus chapters are a little too lengthy for me to read, especially since I have a lot going on in my personal life. Which is also why I took very long to finish, and I wanna apologize for that.

The title actually goes along with the book. I could see and feel that Y/N is struggling a lot and that she fights to endure it all. I have to admit that I didn't form an attachment to the character, but I could say that I sympathize with her and her feelings about attachments. From the glimpses of her story background, I could see that a lot has happened and I hope that she gets a happy ending. 

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Concluding remarks:

I give this book an applause. I know that you have a lot to fix, but seeing how far the story went, I probably missed a lot of things. But even then, if you think that my review was incomplete, then you could patch it up by placing a comment below. A lot of the stuff I said are mostly my preferences as a writer, but a lot of them are just basic tips on writing books.

The book I could say was pretty good. If you wrote this story just for fun, I know that you're continuing it because you love the story and the plot you've came up with. Basically the only things you need to fix is the development pace and more drama between Y/N and the boys to make things more realistic. AND, it would make the readers ponder amongst themselves on whom the girl should really end up with. Otherwise, I think that the girl has serious emotional issues because she easily blushes—which contrasts badly compared to her personality.

So I give you a big thumbs up, and I am waiting for what happens next in the upcoming chapter :D

- R