Title: Red Strings /m.yg

Author: @SofiaKingsley

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Summary:

Summary are short and simple, which is enough to attract readers.

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Cover:

I love the cover. Minimalistic cover, with the main lead, on it. The title is clear enough on the cover, however, I would suggest the Author's name to be bigger, and clear. After all, it is your book.

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Plots:

Review #1:

It was good that the author started with adapting the settings with the girl's daily life. However, I find the first chapter slightly empty. I would suggest that there's a cliffhanger that would make the readers stay and continue their journey on reading your book. From the summary, it is said that the girl has to make ends meet. I wish that the author describe more on it. I would suggest the author to describe more on what the girl had to do in order to survive especially her daily life before she got the internship in Yoongi's company.

I wouldn't pin out the flow of words in the story, because the words choices and beautiful and easy to grasp of what the author is thinking.

Coming on to the further chapters, I have suggestion that if it is possible, try to make space in between two scenes. Example, on the third chapter, the first was where the girl, Astrid is in the cafe, hoping to go home, and the second scene, where she has arrived at her apartment. In order to distinguish the two, make a gap in between, to make it look like there is a time skip. Also in the sixth chapter, where she took a leave after work, and went out from the office. Without spacing, some readers might get confused, and had to reread the whole chapter, and the reader might find this irritating.

One thing you need to work on is to define the characteristics of one's character. I find Yoongi's character to be undefined. I get it, you wanted to make him arrogant, somewhat flirty, but to me, the changed between the two character doesn't flow smoothly. It started with a soft yoongi, then to a cold yoongi in a matter of seconds. I understand if the cold ruthless, arrogant yoongi is to portray his position as an important person, a CEO, but there is no fine line on his treatment towards Astrid especially in early chapters. Then, he turned into a sweet person after "restarting the relationship" which I find good.

Another thing I wanted to point out, is the flow of the story is rather fast for me. Try to create tension in between them before going on to the next phase. I am amazed that the author wrote the book in only Astrid's POV. It kept the readers wonder on Yoongi's POV in the story. It would have been better if, there's more on Astrid's thoughts; her thoughts on Yoongi, before succumbing to Yoongi's seduction.

Honestly, there were a few unnecessary scene in the earlier chapters, such as, her calling for Uber, typing address. That could be cut off, and maybe just stick with the important scene revolving around Yoongi and Astrid more. Another option would be compiled it off in a prologue- how Astrid came out to be his Intern, and the first chapter would started off with her first day of work in the Min Corporation. Since this is the first book you wrote, this is understandable, but do take note that, earlier chapters especially the first five determine whether the readers continue to stay or not.

The flow of the plots changes after the restart of their relationship, the pace was better than it was before. Somehow it felt like, that is the beginning of the story, not the middle of the story. After that the story progressed well, involving her friends and how she cope up with her life. Her relationship struggles with Yoongi.

The ending, I was great that the two met up, but as a reader, especially the readers who followed the journey from the beginning till the end of the book, they would craved for their lives after they have met. I wondered if epilogue would be included. If Yoongi have changed, also their relationship after.

Review #2:

The title is attractive as it suits the story and the cover is pretty with yoongi as the main. The font of the title is big enough to see and the author's name is there as well.The summary is short and sweet. The question at the end makes intrigues me to check the book out.

The entire story is written beautifully with the appropriate words chosen. Honestly, it lacks a bit when I read it like something is missing. It's great that you take your time in delivering the story to your readers but it is a bit dry like it can feel draggy in the first few chapters. And then suddenly, Yoongi's character has a bad personality. I know that he is sort of different and serious in the company but it would be great if you make it flow in smoothly.

It almost ruined my mood as Yoongi was like a really soft person when they met in the cafe and during the phone call so it would be better if you showcased Yoongi's bad personality in a few ways and not so directly.

It's just my opinion though but there may be other readers who appreciate the directness.Overall, it's a really great story that is well structured and interesting plot.

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End note:

Overall, it is a great book. It is just our opinion, and we hope you took it well. The plot is there- the beginning, the climax, and ending- it flows well, but we believe that a little amendments can make a great impact on the book.

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