Story by MustafaAsad6

Review by written_by_ec

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Blurb

Barrels and Clarks. Two elite families in Edinburgh. The fate of both families was written in a very unusual way. Everything seemed to be going well until the families fell into the hands of crime. The avarice for power, fame, and wealth turned everyone into a monster, which can go to any extent to wield it.

The rich miscreants, the mafias, the goon squads, the cops, the genocidal army, and their accomplices brought up mayhem in the capital through murders, lust, injustice, rabble, and pulling off a million-dollar heist in Edinburgh.

It's once said, "You can't run away from destiny. It's pain that makes the legacy."

In this rat race, can anyone be worthy enough to conquer all and create a legacy?

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𓋼 Review 𓋼

Chapters read: 5

𓋼 First impression 𓋼

I liked the cover, the font was big enough and it overall appealed to me and potential readers. The blurb was okay, though it might be more appealing to talk about the main character in the desc as well. Although, I will admit I was hooked from the start.

8/10

𓋼 General 𓋼

 𓋼 HOOK 𓋼

Throughout the chapters, I was hooked and always thinking "What?" whenever there was a cliffhanger. The premise laid for Go, Die, & Come Back was done well and the mystery element was definitely there. Readers will be hooked by the constant question "Was Brandon actually guilty or not?" Overall, it was very interesting.

10/10

𓋼 PLOT & PACING 𓋼

For me, the pacing was a tad bit fast. For example, the Bran and drugs scene happened all in a blink of an eye. I wish there could be some more description or explanation. Where did Brandon get the drugs from? Why did he pour it on the table and then just inhale? In the second chapter, there are huge time skips which don't make a whole lot of sense. How old is everyone by then? There was no explanation of how the Barrels felt about Brandon's disappearance.

As for the plot, I would say it's very well-developed. Each cliffhanger and plot twist made me gasp and reread. My only issue is the time skips are kind of problematic because we don't get to see any of the Barrels progress further than that.

𓋼 WRITING STYLE & GRAMMAR 𓋼

I actually really enjoyed your writing style, it's simplistic but I liked the touches of "fancy vocabulary." You describe characters especially well, including scenes and settings. There are some grammar mistakes such as misspelled words, but that can be easily fixed with a program like Grammarly. The flow is clear and there's no "writing blockage" so to speak.

8/10

𓋼 CHARACTERS 𓋼

The characters were likable and also realistic, their personalities are very distinctive and different as opposed to everyone being a Mary/Gary Sue. They make a lasting impact and readers will most likely enjoy them. Although, I'll note that Brandon is a bit crazy by constantly bashing his younger brother. There's definitely some sibling rivalry there and I'm here for it. However, an issue I face is wondering who is the main character in this story. There could be multiple, but it would be better if there was a central person to focus on in each chapter.

9/10

𓋼 Character development 𓋼

This was a bit tricky for me to do since there's no clear protagonist. For now, I'll focus the character development on Brandon. While he's developed and thinks almost as his own, I wish there was more to his backstory. There could maybe be more perspective on his relationships with his family, especially his father. Plus, what about the drugs? I feel like there's some plot holes in the story that should be fixed.

6.5/10

𓋼 Summary for improvement 𓋼

𓋼 Slow down pacing
𓋼 Lean into character development & explanation
𓋼 Fix plot holes
𓋼 Decide on a central main character (multiple characters/POVs are still fine)
𓋼 Fix misspelled words (use Grammarly)
𓋼 Considering the pros and cons of time skips

Overall, this was 8.5/10 story for me <3

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