The Cure of Darkness by @PrincessBlu06

A great prologue. I loved the mystery and the way you kept the "him" in italics.

A couple of things.

Thoughts should be in italics (you did that) but they don't need any speech marks. I saw a couple of these in the first part.

You had a few sentence fragments which are sentences that look like sentences but aren't officially sentences (sorry, that was very badly explained). It's not very serious but it's a good thing to keep in mind when writing.

You had some issues with commas. This, again wasn't very serious, and it all depends on where you want to put the pause.

Writing thoughts apply the same rules as dialogue expect you use italics and no speech marks.

This was a very immersive story, which was brilliant. The characters were all in depth and you gave enough back story to fill the reader in but not too much that it became overwhelming. You also raised questions to keep the reader engaged, with was excellent.

Overall, a brilliant start. Not much bad stuff I could say about this (which is disappointing for me because I'm looking for ways to pick things to shreds. But it's good for you so you don't have me nattering at you all the time) :)

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