Hunter's Shadow by @EmmaConnolly379

You need commas to split clauses.

Its/it's

Commas splices again - use semi colons or full stops.

Commas before names (especially before 'brother' in one of the chapters.)

The description was vivid and breathtaking!!!!!!!!

Apostrophes of possession!!

Overall, a fantastic continuation. Keep it up!

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