The Device by @Jbarryt
CHAPTERS 4-6
I feel like I've already said this before but your paragraphs are a bit long so maybe separate them into smaller chunks.
Numbers spelled out in full look more formal.
The description wad very good - I could really imagine this other world.
I feel like things should have more names - especially in Ghett's world. I think this will make the world seem more real.
You mentioned George looked human but I must have missed that with the fight with the doctor. Maybe add that in?
I like the POV switching. I feel like it does have potential and could really go somewhere.
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