The Device by @Jbarryt

Really great start - I could picture it in my head from the very first paragraph. Especially liked the comparison with the grain of rice (hope you know what I mean.)

Grammar was en pointe - and if I did find mistakes they were tiny.

Only thing I can say is maybe break up the paragraphs a bit more for easier reading. But that's only a suggestion.

The story reminded me of a mix between the Matrix, Inception, and the Fifth Wave.

Numbers spelled out look more formal.

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