Winners

🥇First Place🥇 

The Duchess Cannot Sleep by Kehanni

🥈Second Place🥈 

Leeward by empiresofwater

🥉Third Place🥉

Old Soul Syndrome by Jagermeanshunter

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Scores

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1. Divergence: The Vampire Queen - MoonDahliaWrites

Title: 7/10
Cover: 9/10
Blurb: 5/10
Grammar: 13/15
Originality: 5/10
Writing Style: 13/15  
Plot: 10/15
Character Development: 8/10
Overall enjoyment: 4/5

Total: 74/100

Short review: chapters are VERY long. Chapter 2 is listed as taking 1 hour to read. That's far too long for Wattpad, which recommends no more than 3.5k per chapter. The sex scenes are the best part of the story. In non-sex parts, esp in the first 2 chapters, there are too many repetitions of the same information, only with different words and some extraneous scenes/action. Many modern words like "wow", "high thread count" "chemical cocktail of endorphins", "passing the buck" ruin the illusion of a historical setting at times. However, from chapter 3 onward, the story takes off and would a definite draw for vampire erotica fans.  

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2. The Duchess Cannot Sleep - Kehanni

Title: 10/10
Cover: 10/10
Blurb: 5/10
Grammar: 15/15 
Originality: 8/10
Writing Style: 13/15
Plot: 13/15
Character Development: 7/10
Overall enjoyment: 3/5

Total: 84/100

Short review: The beginning is rather shaky, with a lot of info dumps. But around the beheading scene -- which is really very good -- the story begins to take off and the writing improves by bounds. The concept is good, but much of the dictatorial fantasy elements (non-aging is illegal, for example) rather gets in the way of the totally creepy story this could be. The "haunting the dead" and her constant rejection by Death/The Underworld is a great idea and very enjoyable.

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3. Katherine Wells - Kyla-Gilbert

Title: 7/10
Cover: 9/10
Blurb: 2/10
Grammar: 9/15
Originality: 6/10
Writing Style: 11/15  
Plot: 13/15
Character Development: 7/10
Overall enjoyment: 2/5

Total: 66/100

Short review: Many instances of incorrect punctuation, misused words and incorrect grammar. As far as 'historic" goes, there is no time period given and the details bounce from medieval to 19th century, which makes the world into pure fantasy and not historic fiction at all.  The plot is quite sound in its essence and has potential, but there are too many extraneous details (to the plot or characterisation) for it to really blossom. Characterization is also a problem, as many characters are portrayed as "all good" (the sisters, Mrs Hale) or "all bad" (the mother).  The author definitely has writing talent, but it's is still quite raw. Though practice and refinement, she'll go far! 

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4. Leeward - empiresofwater

Title: 10/10
Cover: 4/10
Blurb: 7/10
Grammar: 15/15
Originality: 7/10
Writing Style: 13/15
Plot: 14/15
Character Development: 7/10
Overall enjoyment: 4/5

Total: 81/100

Short review: Parts of this remind strongly of the film "Master and Commander". Somewhat similar story line and characters. The first chapter at the Battle of the Nile is VERY confusing. We don't know who is who, so can't judge the impact, which is a shame as it's formative for Nightingale's character.  For chapters 2-5 there is quite a lot of tell and not enough setting or character "show". A suggestion: cut the scene where Nightengale gets his new orders from Bridger and only indicate that something is up (through show) as Nightingale boards the Scylla. The same information will be given later at dinner. It'd be more impactful if the reader hears it along with the crew (and doesn't have to listen to it again, as we already know the changes). The problem with his eyes is a good addition. 

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5. Old Soul Syndrome - Jagermeanshunter

Title: 8/10
Cover: 10/10
Blurb: 10/10
Grammar: 15/15
Originality: 7/10
Writing Style: 15/15
Plot: 5/15
Character Development: 7/10
Overall enjoyment: 3/5

Total: 80/100

Short review: Great voice and the flow is excellent. But, the form of the story is rather disjointed (at least in the first 5 chapters). Abby simply jumps back in time, nothing (much) happens there other than she *might* meet Daniel. That's not enough to see an interesting story arc appearing. The images in 1944 are, while well-rendered, rather generic ones we see/read about. There's very little to make it it's own -- which I know you have the talent to do. The 1870 is better in that regard. 

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6. The Plan - angiexvi

Title: 7/10
Cover: 7/10
Blurb: 9/10
Grammar: 11/15
Originality: 6/10
Writing Style: 12/15
Plot: 9/15
Character Development: 8/10
Overall enjoyment: 2/5

Total: 71/100

Short review: Many historical inaccuracies and modernisms (both in ideas and in speech). The story, just in general, seems to be portraying far more a stereotypical medieval mindset, by far not one of the 19th century. No 19th century Western European royal murdered their family to become monarch...which tanks the concept of the plot. There is a lot of tell, and very little show. The characters are rather black & white, either all good or all evil, which does not make for good villains or heroes. The writing itself is not bad.  

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7. Hopelessly Devoted to Him - shapoolove

Title: 8/10
Cover: 8/10
Blurb: 5/10
Grammar: 1/15
Originality: 7/10
Writing Style: 5/15 
Plot: 7/15
Character Development: 8/10
Overall enjoyment: 1/5

Total: 50/100

Short Review: many phrasing and pronoun errors, grammar errors, inconsistent tenses, all of which makes understanding and following the story difficult.  There is very little development with many scenes, except for the romantic/sexual parts which are about at the correct length. There is very little worldbuilding detail that would tell us it's 3000 BC. The mention of sweatpants and chandeliers indicates a modern setting and the characters behave & speak like modern people, not ancients. Still, the main story idea of one woman having to marry two brothers is interesting and encourages reading on.

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8. We Are One - dwarkaratna

Title: 8/10
Cover: 1/10
Blurb: 1/10
Grammar: 5/15
Originality: 5/10
Writing Style: 3/15
Plot: 9/15
Character Development: 8/10
Overall enjoyment: 5/5

Total: 44/100

Short review: This is a script, not a fictional story. It also seems to be following the storyline of a TV series? (I'm guessing this based on the pictures) The grammar and phrasing errors make understanding the story difficult at times, but the brother's playful banter was quite enjoyable and made the reading experience light and fun. There is, unfortunately, no real setting description or character description. It's only dialog, which means a low score on many points of the judging criteria. The cover is a jumble of photos and the title is far too small (and placed directly in the middle) which makes it appear as if very little thought or effort went into it. Which probably isn't true. On the website "Canva" you can find many -- free! -- templates to help you with making a cover that will attract in more readers. 

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