Submitted by Starfire_The_Hybrid.

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(I made a new OC just for this, just to see if I'm any good at creating them lol.)
Good to know I'm not the only one who does this haha.

BASIC INFORMATION;;
------ Name: Sentinel.
I love that word.

------ Age: 20
Lookin' good, pretty mature adult.

------ Gender: Male
Can't complain here.

------ Sexuality: Straight
------ Tribe: NightWing

------ Abilities: Just normal NightWing abilities, no moon powers. He also has a strong sense of smell and like the other NightWings on the volcano, he has a "venomous" bite (I don't know how to describe the bacteria saliva thing from Starflight's book lol). 
I'm not sure if venomous is the right word; it's more bacteria than actual poison. This may have been based of the Komodo dragon's bite - scientists theorised that it would bite its prey, and the bacteria in its mouth would infect the wound and kill it that way. Recent research has actually proved that to be false, but I'm assuming it's what happens with NightWings. Maybe stick to "bacterial".

------ Relationship Status: A single pringle that's not ready to mingle.
Precious.

------ Occupation: Was a guard when he still lived on the volcano, but decided to become a trader about 5 or 6 years after the NightWings moved to the rainforest.
Interesting change. I like it.

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PHYSICAL DESCRIPTION;;
He has dull raisin purple scales and his underbelly is a slightly lighter shade of that. His horns and claws are black while the spines on his back are the same color of his scales. His eyes are a dark emerald green.
Perfectly reasonable NightWing description. Good job!

He has a scar across his snout and two small ones on his neck and three small scars close together on his underbelly.
Where did those come from?

Sentinel is a rather tall and scrawny dragon, years of malnourishment at the volcano is the reason for his scrawniness. He has rough talons from years of walking on the sharp rocks of the volcano and a whip thin tail.
Good. It's very reasonable that the volcano would affect the way he looks.

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PERSONALITY;;
------ Strengths: He's fiercely loyal to his tribe.
Is that really a strength? Winter's loyalty to the IceWings caused him to (initially) hate Moon and Qibli. Riptide's loyalty to the SeaWings caused him to attack Clay on sight, before he'd even met him. Morrowseer's loyalty to the NightWings caused him to set up a whole grand scheme involving a war, five dragonets and a false prophecy, resulting in the death of hundreds and ruining... well, quite a few lives. Loyalty isn't necessarily always a good thing - explain why it's a strength of his character!
Definitely don't take it out, though. It's one of the most important characteristics of a Pyrrhian dragon.

Dedicated, kind to his friends, smart, and resourceful.
"Kind to his friends" is a pretty meaningless statement. I'm sure President Trump is kind to his friends too. So was Hitler. So was that creepy 2nd-grade teacher who hated your class. Treating your loved ones nicely doesn't really make you a nice person.

------ Flaws: He is usually rude and inconsiderate to those of the other tribes.
GOOD GOOD. That's perfectly befitting of a NightWing, and works well with his loyalty to his tribe.

Kind of fears fire and won't breathe it.
Oh? Why's this?

Underestimates others. It takes awhile for dragons who aren't NightWings to befriend him.
Very cohesive. I like it.

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BACKSTORY;;
(Its kind of long, sorry!)
No need to apologise! Length can be a good indicator of depth and development.

Sentinel was hatched into a family of guards. Both of his parents were, and they expected him to be one, hence why they chose the name Sentinel.
I'm so glad you explained his name.

His relationship with his parents is a very caring one. With NightWing dragonets being scarce at the volcano, his parents were just thankful he existed.
Your attention to canon NightWing life is good.

And they tried their best to be loving parents despite the fights they would have. Oddly enough they all bonded the most over battle training. (Sorry, no edgy parent backstory here lol).
Never apologise for lack of edge.

Sentinel's time on the volcano effected his personality negatively, much like it did with the rest of the tribe. He resented the other tribes (especially IceWings for obvious reasons lol) for being fortunate enough to live on the mainland. The smoke gave him some breathing problems, he runs out of breath quickly on his travels and has to rest a lot. 
Thank you. This is what we need to see in NightWings. Actual negative effects of life in the volcano.

The volcano eruption traumatized him into getting nightmares about him, his friends and family dying from the eruption almost every night. And he's scared to be around large amounts of fire (things like bonfires).
Ah, so that's where it comes from? Interesting.

Ever since escaping the volcano, his regard for the other tribes started to change, he respected Glory enough to try to be nice(ish) to the RainWings, even though he wants to bang his head against a rock after he has a conversation with one. And he was tempted to go out and explore Pyrrhia and meet the other tribes since he wasn't permitted to at the volcano.
Interesting. Most of the NightWings were initially bitter towards the RainWings, although they have started warming up gradually. I'm assuming this is the case with him?

A few years after Darkstalker rose from the mountain (which scared him almost as much as the volcano did) Sentinel got the idea to become a trader when he was exploring the rainforest and he realized that the other tribes pretty much never go to the rainforest and probably don't have anything from it.
Fascinating. I like where this is going.

So with Queen Glory's permission he started his trading business. But first he had to get stuff that other dragons would actually trade stuff for. Sentinel, with the help of his family and friends, gathered many things like exotic bird feathers, coffee beans (cause dragons need coffee!!), herbs, he even had toxic frogs in jars, and a few RainWings gave him some sleeping darts and guns that he could trade (he had more stuff but I'm too lazy to list it all).
Dragons do indeed need coffee. This sounds like a very pleasant setup - I've actually never seen a merchant OC whose owner actually went into what they traded. Did he take anyone with him? I can imagine it must've been hard leaving his entire tribe.

It wasn't much at first, but is was a start. The first place he went to was the Scorpion Den, mostly because it was the closest place to go to.
Interesting choice, given that the Scorpion Den is a pretty hostile place.

The SandWings were surprised to see him to say the least. Many were hostile towards him, but many were also open minded and gave his wares a look.
This is actually pretty accurate, based on the SandWings we've seen in the canon. The Scorpion Den is a surprisingly diverse place - they have a few hybrids running round, lots of bandits, several merchants and gold-diggers in search of new wares. I can see how he'd get customers there.

He was actually pretty successful there. The SandWings liked the sleeping darts and guns the most, and they traded him all kinds of desert related stuff to him.
Oh dear, I can imagine those Scorpion Den thugs eager for such a neat new weapon.

And that's what kicked off his trade business. Now he trades things from all of the tribes (except IceWings cause they probably wouldn't trade with a NightWing, and he's unable to go to their kingdom) and he's happier than he's been in a long time.
Wonderful! I like happy endings.

I kind of have a funny idea for a story that his trade business would get him into some trouble eventually, but this is all I got for now.
I'm intrigued.

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COMMENTS;;
------ The good...
I think my favourite thing about Sentinel is that he's so ordinary. His circumstances, personality and development are well-matched to the canon. There's nothing alarmingly unique about him, but he doesn't blend into the background either. Your details on his life as a tradesman struck me as quaint and well thought out.

------ The bad...
You could widen out his personality a bit. A few sentences doesn't always cut it; you threw all these things out, like dedicated, resourceful, etc., and then left them. Each of them alone could mean a hundred different things. Try diving in a bit more to see what you can flesh out.

------ How you can improve!
Definitely put a bit more thought into his personality. It's time to start refining. Another thing you could look at is his family back in the rainforest. Leaving home to start life in an unfamiliar place is never easy; think about how they reacted (do they approve? Do they miss him?) and whether they keep in contact. You could maybe also add some more to his initial business. In the real world, entrepreneurship of any sort is difficult. He's bound to have made a mistake somewhere.

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OVERALL RATING;; 9/10.
I feel like my "overall rating" thing is wildly inconsistent (I keep seeing people going "Why does this OC have a higher score than this one?" and I apologise). Oh well.

- Siri Mom.