AUTHOR'S NOTE;;
Second derg from animallove299, and he looks fantastic!
Yes, children you are allowed to submit as many OCs as you'd like.
I hope you find this rating useful!
- Siri Mom.

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BASIC DETAILS;;
------ Name: Ember.
Seems pretty fair for a SkyWing. I know the name was nearly used in the canon at one point, but at the moment it's open game.

------ Age: Currently 35.
I personally think this is a great age for an OC; he's old enough to have some experience with the world, but young enough to be able to fight and hunt and explore.

------ Gender: Male.
First male in this book so far! Congrats on that.

------ Sexuality: Bi-romantic, asexual.
Same. As in. That's literally my orientation

------ Tribe: SkyWing.
I'll admit there aren't that many active SkyWings in this fandom, so congrats on that.

------ Abilities: He is a strong flier, can breath fire, and has all the other normal SkyWing powers.
All perfectly reasonable and normal abilities. Well done!

------ Relationship Status: He is too busy to have a love life.
Well, that's a first. Most OCs I know are either taken, or looking for a significant other. The fact that you've distanced this character from that says a lot, and I applaud you here.

------ Occupation: A hard-working military officer working his way to general! He joined the army at the beginning of the SandWing Succession, and is still serving to this day.
Aww, go Ember! I hope he makes it to general one day. While admittedly soldier is a very common SkyWing occupation, it makes sense, given the recent bloodshed.

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PHYSICAL DESCRIPTION;;
Ember would be quite handsome if it weren't for the scars from the many wounds he has possessed throughout his career, the largest of which resides on his shoulder.
What's this? Scars that detract from his appearance? Those are as rare as jewels out here! What you've done is incredibly realistic, and a pleasant change from the norm.

He has fiery red scales and orange eyes that can seem incredibly intimidating. His build is as muscular as a SkyWing's can really be, (since SkyWings are quite slim creatures) from his years of fighting, and he is average height for a SkyWing male. Ember's tail is a bit longer than average.
ABS ABS ABS ABS ABS.
A completely average dragon, huh? I really have uncovered quite a treasure here!

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PERSONALITY;;
------ Strengths: Ember has a large supply of self confidence, and just confidence in general, that serves him well in his career. He is a loyal soldier and tries to be understanding with his fellow soldiers.
Gosh darnit I'm getting sentimentally attached now. These strengths are varied, but kept in control. They are a tad... normal, especially for a soldier, but nonetheless they suit this dragon very well. So overall, good job here.

------ Flaws: Key word is TRIES. Ember can come off as sarcastic and rude, since he can be a 'deal with it' type of dragon. He is gruff and, though intelligent, sometimes acts before he thinks. This can lead him into some tough situations.
Ah, here they are. A beautiful sheaf of flaws to complement the strengths. They all seem pretty muted, but all in all they work pretty well.

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BACKSTORY;;
Ember was raised by loving parents, but was always a little lonely being the only dragonet.
Aw, poor kiddo. Just keep in mind that most SkyWings lay single eggs or clutches of two or three (from what I've seen; I may be wrong), and that they do tend to keep the hatchlings in one part of the palace. So he would still have had friends.

His family was loyal to Queen Scarlet, and his father was in the Queen's army.
I haven't met many Scarlet-supporting SkyWings; everyone's always either a rebel or not even in the kingdom. This is very realistic for the timeset, though, and brave too - most character creators I know seem too scared to add even the faintest inkling of moral incorrectness into their OCs.

He was always average, average life, average talents, so when he was old enough, he decided to become something different.
Interesting, interesting. Normally, most dragonets either excel at everything, or fail at it all. I feel like you could elaborate a bit more on this; surely he had at least one outstanding quality or hamartia somewhere in there?

He willingly joined the military, proving his skills of fighting and leadership.
I'd possibly change "proving" to "developing" (ooo look at me being a little proofreader here). If he was so average, where did these talents come from? It's more likely that he'd have developed them during integration into the infantry and throughout the course of the war as he rose in rank.

Though it took a long time, he slowly gained respect from his fellow fighters.
This is good. You've taken the time to acknowledge that good things don't come instantly, and shown that he did have to work to get there. I'm probably the most pleased with the "slowly".

When Scarlet was thrown from the throne, he was ever loyal to Ruby and to this day still serves.
We could use a bit of explanation here; why did he switch? Did he always prefer Ruby? Was it peer pressure? Or did he simply wish to avoid becoming an exile?
Whatever the reason, I feel like we'd benefit from seeing it here.

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COMMENTS;;
------ The good...
Let me just say, I love this dragon. I love him, I love him, I love him. Ember epitomises what I've said earlier: that in terms of powers, normal is the new unique. That sounds awfully backward, I must say. But this dragon, as far as weird powers go, is completely ordinary: purebred, with no abnormal abilities or unnatural characteristics. He's your regular Pyrrhian - and he's something I feel like the fandom needs more of.
That's not to say unique is a bad thing. In fact, that'll be my very next point. In some cases, abnormality can produce fantastic results!
I'm just incredibly happy to see a dragon like this. His personality flows well, and his backstory fits the circumstances perfectly. You can sit back and applaud yourself on this OC.

------ The bad...
Okay, this'll sound ironic. But to be perfectly honest, there's something about Ember that seems a little... flat. As if you've been so careful with avoiding any notable traits that you've created a bit of an anti-Sue. Now that you have this baseline formed, work off it! Don't be afraid to add one or two wild traits in there. Maybe he's super-fond of wearing bright-coloured accessories, or a horrendously loud snorer. He could be completely terrified of scavengers.
My point is, a little experimenting wouldn't hurt.
I also feel like you could elaborate little more with his personality. At the moment, he's a great character, but he doesn't really stick out in anyone's memory. You need to consider adding a quality that makes him more notable.

------ How you can improve!
Let me just be clear: what you have right now is brilliant. Whatever you do, please don't change anything in the "Basic Details" section. Ever. Please. This is so rare.
Instead, I'd be focusing more on your character's personality and backstory. I'd focus on getting to know this character a bit better, and trying to determine a suitable unique trait for him. Something to make him stand out a little. You could also try to add a little more detail in the backstory; maybe talk about where he currently is, and include a bit more on how he got there. Did he have any major battles? A defining moment of any sort? Where did he get that shoulder scar from?
All this would just help to really sharpen out the edges around this character.

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OVERALL RATING;; 8.5/10.
Ember is one of the most realistic OCs I've seen in this fandom for a good while now. I truly do congratulate you; you've done an excellent job!

However, you could branch out a little. Now that you've come this far, it's time to add in some brighter colours; by this, I mean give him some sort of more memorable trait. One that fans can remember him by.

I'm enjoying doing this so much you have no idea. To everyone who's submitted an OC, I really appreciate you.

Happy writing!

- Siri Mom.