REVIEW DONE BY : FirstNailInTheCoffin

Title/cover :

The title is a little long for my liking. I personally much prefer when book titles are one to three words, as it otherwise ends up being difficult to both say and remember. Since the best way for a book to succeed is to have your readers thinking about it and wanting to finish, a quick and easy title is the best solution.

The cover is incredibly pretty. The shade of blue is beautiful and I love the minimalist design. I genuinely don't have any criticisms about it. Good job!

Chapter reviews :

Chapter 1 :

This was a very interesting introduction to the book. The beginning of the book was an incredibly realistic portrayal of a high school setting, although it seemed to dissipate near the end. I will talk about this more in a later section of this review.

I commented on any little details I thought could use some reworking.

Near the end, the story ended up feeling more like a cliche high school story than anything. I won't make any judgments until I read on, but I do think the scene could have been handled a little bit better.

Chapter 2 :

This wasn't a very compelling chapter, I found myself fairly bored for most of it. Since we're in a high school setting, it makes sense to follow the students' everyday classes and such, but I really expect something more enjoyable from a book. The whole chapter was the consequence of the first chapter, but it also didn't make much sense. So many overreactions just over such a small insignificant thing? And our mc said that she made an enemy already. An enemy for such a reason? This is real high school drama cubed.

Chapter 3 :

We began the chapter with a metaphor about bubbles and auras. I wasn't very sure how this would lead to the story, and I was worried you included it just for the sake of including it but I was thankfully pleasantly surprised. The bubble metaphor was incorporated very nicely into the story. Well done.

I'm not sure if it was only my brain being slow, but this chapter felt much more descriptive than the ones prior.

The beginning of the chapter was incredibly slow and not very entertaining to read. We spent most of the time inside Elena's head. While I usually love this, she didn't really have any interesting thoughts that kept me engaged. Thankfully, the end got a bit more interesting.

I absolutely love seeing friendships in books, and the one between Elena and Xavier is very precious. I'll talk more about it in a later section of my review.

Chapter 4 :

The chapter opens with a mystery, which is a great way to invest the reader. I do hope this gets addressed in a later chapter though, otherwise, it would feel like forced conflict.

We went back to high school and saw some more characterization and plot getting structured which is a very pleasant sight.

Plot :

The plot is really your typical high school plot from what I saw. A girl going through school with a very smart friend who she admires, another male friend who she's very close to and a rival who could turn into a lover. I'm worried that some of the predictions I've made will

I can't help but wonder, is school transport free where this book takes place? Elena suddenly switched and decided to take the school bus, but where I'm from, taking the school bus can cause hundreds every year. Maybe this needs some more cultural context.

You wanted me to point out some plot holes in the story, but I don't think I've read enough to really notice them, so I apologize for that.

Characterization :

The characters. There really isn't that much to say about them.

You wanted me to specifically point out any clichés I may see in your story, and honestly, there's quite a lot of them. I guess it tends to be difficult to avoid them when writing a book with a high school setting but it's always nice to see an author put in more effort into avoiding them.

Of course, clichés aren't always a bad thing, but most readers these days are looking for something new and fresh, and sticking to the same old formulas is what often hinders a story's success.

One of the clichés I noticed is the various social groups in the school. "Jocks", "Popular kids"

That's as cliché as you get. That one guy, Troye, is basically your typical big, muscular jock who's really stupid. The lack of intelligence along with his size were both emphasized on in chapter 2.

I loved the way you portrayed friendships in your story. The relationship between Elena and Xavier is so pure and precious. It's everything a teenager could ask for. Unfortunately, this chapter and some of the next ones led me to believe that they would end up falling in love with each other. Nothing wrong with that of course, but it's another cliché I don't like seeing. I will be severely impressed if, by the end of the book, Elena doesn't end up with either Xavier or Troye.

Some descriptions in chapter 4 also felt like a set up for a love triangle between Elena, Xavier, and Troye. I'm not very excited to see that.

Elena seems to be subconsciously very jealous of her friend's success. This could cause some very interesting conflicts in the future which I'd love to see. It's only natural for a teenager to feel inferior to someone if said person is more successful than them.

Grammar :

The grammar was generally very good. I commented on any mistakes I found in their respective chapters, and I hope you took my suggestions into account. There isn't much more to say in this section.

Writing style/format :

I like writing style a lot.

Although the sentence structure could be improved. Lots of sentences begin with "she" and such and it isn't very compelling to read.

The paragraphs were all a great length. They didn't feel too short and didn't drag on.

The chapter-length was also perfect for Wattpad. It wasn't agonizingly long and boring but also wasn't finished in two minutes. Although the nature of the book did make the chapters hard to get through sometimes.

One more thing: the imagery in this story is phenomenal, especially following chapter 3.

Overall :

While this was a fun book to read, I think it could be greatly improved. So far it seems to be filled with clichés and basic plots to get the story started. I really do hope you consider my suggestions, as I really do think they will help you out!