Reviewer: inspiredwriter3456
Book: Reign of Blood and Deceits by RuthHawthorne

Thoughts on Title, Cover, and Blurb:

Firstly, I love the cover! It's gorgeous and conveys the theme of the book beautifully. The attention to detail is stunning and I adore the mystery of the subtitle (it's a little hard to see though, but the color doesn't blend in with the cover much which I would consider a plus!).

For the blurb, it's excellent! The way you played up the important aspects of the story without spoiling anything is a great hook, without making the blurb too long. If I came across this book while I was browsing Wattpad, I would absolutely check it out. However, I might suggest rephrasing a thing or two. Like for example, where it says "show her salvage and sympathy"? Salvage isn't the best word to use in that context, even if the intent and meaning got across properly. The title is also a great choice! It might work better if the 's' at the end of deceit was cut out, but it's a small thing. Any fantasy fan looking for a good read would be reeled in by the cover and how engaging the blurb is.

Thoughts on First Few Chapters:

The imagery, the metaphors, and your writing style creates such a vivid picture of everything that's going on! I could tell plenty of effort was put into constructing the lore. Since there aren't many chapters, I haven't gotten a good read on the characters, like Aeron, but I am intrigued by what I've read so far. The mystery of it all sparks my imagination and is making it run wild! The anticipation is going to drive me crazy!

As suggestions, there's still some work to be done on grammar and pacing. The vivid description is a wonderful thing about your writing, but most of the sentences are really long. For me as a reader, it gets difficult to keep track of everything when the sentences go on without stopping. The semicolons, dashes, and commas help, but using periods would definitely balance things out. There also might be an overuse of semicolons in a few paragraphs here and there. As far as I can tell, you use them accurately. Still, it might be a good idea to check if the semicolons work with the sentence wherever you use them and vary sentence lengths when you write.

Conclusion:

Overall, I loved the story! It shows a lot of promise and I can already tell it's going to be one of my favorite reads as you keep developing the story. Most of the stuff I mentioned about areas you can work on are some of the smaller aspects of writing and skills that develop with a lot of practice and in no way takes away from the fantastical awesomeness of your story. Can't wait to read more of it!