REVIEW DONE BY : AimForTheTop

Summary :

Frank Milner is in search of perfection, he falls in love with Taylor, and apparently his search comes to an end, as he found the embodiment of perfection herself, the girl he fell for.

Blurb :

It was very clear, you explained the story's actions perfectly and didn't give extra information. Meaning the blurb was clear but still some actions turned out unexpectedly. However, there was nothing about Frank Milner himself, we know he is on a search for perfection, but who is he, doctor ? Psychopath ? Geologist ? Teacher ? We still have no idea what's his daily job, and no idea why is he in search for perfection, is it some psychological issues he has ? Maybe he just wants to feel complete, that has yet to be specified.

Chapter 1 :

I liked the start of the chapter, the description is good it's also very specific and it pictures the events well, we had a view of Frank's desk, his workplace maybe ? Anyways, a picture was drawn there. We met the perfection ; Taylor too. However, i have several comments on that, even tho i quite liked the start, i am interested in seeing a bigger image. What was Frank doing before Taylor came in ? Was is some kinda paperwork ? If you want to keep that start, maybe add something like "Frank let go of the papers he was signing to look at her....".
How could we make sure if we never learned where the actions were taking place ? This could be Frank's workstation, but it also may very well be somewhere else. Too many options and not that much of an explanation.

I liked the description that you used to embody the perfection Taylor represents, but it also lacked some details, we can picture the lips and the figure, but nothing about her facial features was revealed, maybe her nose her hair, add a lil bit to the mix. Why you ask ? Well if she is perfection, then i am sure the readers would be interested in knowing more.

It is very clear that Taylor is also in love with Frank, since she was ready to go through extreme pain only to please him, without even arguing, her personality is developed well, from the small dialogue, i could pick up many details about her as a person/character. I can tell she is very caring, since she wouldn't leave before asking if Frank needed anything else, as well as her being in love for the reason i cited earlier, i can tell she is confident and has full trust in Frank too, since she didn't question his request and acted it out, she didn't care what would that mean about her fate and all, she only acted and didn't have to think twice.

I am interested to see what the world of "Pursuit for perfection" has to reveal, it is not an ordinary human interaction world, if it was then perfection wouldn't be possible, however i do believe it happens in some technically developed world where technology rules, i may have an idea to where that world was inspired from, but i do want to explore the corners of this world, maybe add that there was a tv in the room, the channel was giving info about the technology's evolution, just to give a wider idea.

From what i could gather, Taylor isn't a human being, she has been made to be perfection, her bones get broken yet she's still alive, she has been practically dead, yet revived. She also somehow has emotions, which are never found in any kind of different beings, robots for example do not have feelings, however, Taylor has some serious emotions, she can sense all the pain even tho she doesn't cry, we can still picture her agony. She was made to be pain and pleasure at the same time. I would love to know more about her structure. GIVE US MORE !!

Frank also seems to have serious issues, he is overly obsessed with her perfection that he doesn't see what kind of imperfection he creates himself being such a bad human being, hurting the person that supposedly meant the most to him. On that note I would like to point out that we never learned what Frank actually looked like, his description was practically inexistent.

The characters are well explained, as you can see from the last two paragraphs i wrote, the design of every character is specific and it tells a lot, it helps predict their actions.

Chapter 2 :

So now i can definitely see the « thriller » part of the book, like i would have never expected that the perfect Taylor was a modified version of Frank's actual wife. The events are explained well, there is evidence there is proof, it seems you nailed the thriller part of the book for sure.

One little comment on it tho, in the first chapter, we had a view of Taylor and Frank's intimate relationship, we could definitely tell that Frank Milner is a scientist who went as far as to make his own wife perfection by using the wonders of science. But the start of the second chapter was distant from the end of the first chapter. Meaning the second chapter started with « it was a lazy spring afternoon » maybe just add that it happened how long after the first chapter. Was it next day, week maybe month ?

The moment Mrs Amy showed up to his door, Frank panicked, it was obviously not her first visit and she seeks the truth behind Taylor's disappearance. So we can say Frank was nervous to the thought of her finding our the truth. Maybe try to emphasize on that feeling, since this isn't the protagonist's POV, you can't just explain nervousness, it has to develop throughout Frank's actions. You can show the hesitation to open the door, or the sly trembling when she got to him with all her proof.

I am extremely shooketh that you ended it on the suspense like that. HOW AM I SUPPOSED TO LIVE NOW ?! Anyways, it was all thought through the actions, the chronology was enjoyable and even the characters were a delight to live this journey with. We thought the hero was Frank, turns out it is a different story.

I can finally understand why this story wasn't rated as romance, clearly what was expected to be love turned out to be an obsession/possession. Frank is obsessed with perfection, he decided to go to such extremes only to create someone that'll be perfect, that alone was a plot twist, it was a story that i 100% enjoyed reading.

Plot :

All the actions were thought through i didn't feel you were making actions up, no you were going with the flow of the story, and it was perfectly synchronized. From Taylor hiding to Amy interrogating Frank, til finally we found out what we could expect the least, Frank isn't really our good guy.

Characters :

I liked the development of the different characters. We have Taylor, she is perfect, obedient and obviously she is controlled yet she never ran away. Then we have Frank, he is obsessed with perfection and has made a sacrifice to obtain it. This may show as an act of pure craziness and selfishness but considering Frank's mental condition i doubt you can blame him. He has done wrong things, yet he got what he deserved in the end, even tho it meant leaving us on a cliffhanger glares at zood

Settings and Locales :

My main complaint is here, we did see description, and what we had the chance to see was pure work of art, however there is a lot to the world of "Pursuit for perfection" we have yet to discover, the laboratory for example we got the description of the table Frank was working on, and then the window when Taylor came in. I believe the room is much wider than that, so maybe widen the area. Or as another example, when Frank ran out of his house, we never got to see what kinda neighborhood he lived in, maybe show a lil bit of it while he was running, you can even add some of the neighbors reaction to Frank running out of his house and getting knocked out by a woman, that's pretty suspicious if you ask me.

Overview :

The book is really good, i totally didn't expect this when i started reading, it served me action, thrill and mystery all i am in search for in a book, even tho it is a short story, it was enough to make me attached to this work. The things i pointed out earlier can be taken in consideration and if i missed out on anything please forgive my poor soul and spare my life zaid and tori lol.

Okay so if we wanna discuss the grammar, i didn't pick up any mistakes while reading, be it about the tenses, ponctuation or even the placement of words so you got yourself a pretty good ( and very picky ) editor, there has been some moments i thought i'd rather read the story in past tense but since the actions are in the present it made more sense grammatically.

So now Zaid is probably thinking : nah diala's just being nice.
Well it's not the case, i am giving my genuine opinion about the book and no sugarcoating. The book is very good and you are very talented, so yeah that's pretty much all i have to say.

And when Tori reads this she gonna be like : diala took her sweet time and came up with only this ? Someone is slacking off work.
However remember i am very nice and you love me a lot and zaid is afraid of us being friends too which is kinda weird ( stop being paranoid zaid )

NOW THE MOMENT YOU HAVE ALL BEEN WAITING FOR :

Would i recommend this book ? Oh well yeah sure, everyone who is willing to read do me a favor and vote, comment and share ( or else i can be real scary and chop of your limbs 😌 )
Pursuit for perfection is simply perfect, no i was not making a pun out of the title my english is just that poor.

Hope you weren't disappointed with your work !
( now imma go off discord so i don't hear from you two, yes this is how much i love you. BLAME ZAID FOR EVERYTHING )