REVIEW DONE BY : AimForTheTop

Expect the review to be short, since the pointers i gave you were repeated in partially all the chapters, i have read all the book, yes, as it was requested, and have given you many ways to improve.

Chapter 1 :

The way the chapter started is a tactic i do not recommend, try starting it by a definition of love at least so we know the concept you are trying to make clear.

Now when you are describing the illusion, "my eyes deceived me" that's present tense, but the next sentence "or my soul was playing tricks on me" here you used past tense. You have to make choice, the story is either in the past tense or present, not both. This goes for the rest of the chapter aswell.

One more comment on the first sentence, your soul cannot play tricks on you, these are usually the eyes, so the glitch is in the concept here. I understand you do not want to cause a repetition of "eyes" twice, but that changes the meaning of the description.

I would also advise you to add description, question is where ? Well, to make that paragraph more enjoyable, i suggest that when he was contemplating her features, maybe add what these features were

Chapter 3 :

Okay so when you say "combination" it usually occurs to the readers that this creature is a mix of two mystical beings, no need to add the "hlaf.... and half..." since the word combination makes it useless.

I picked up a lot of structural flaws in many sentences such as "there are many things i still did not know about him" you can simply replace it by "there are many things about his attitude that remained a mystery to me" or even in the following sentence, she said that this creature found her 2 years and 7months ago, wouldn't this be enough to learn at least the basic things about someone ? To me it would be. You could at least count what was still a trigger to her in order not to loose the readers there.

"But that's another story to tell on how we met" this sentence is confusing, and grammatically inexistent. Try using this instead "the story of how we met is one i will keep to another time" or even "our meeting is another story to tell" if you insist on keeping a glimpse of that expression.

There is a contrast with the tenses you choose and the actions happening. "At the moment i was reorganizing" when you use the expression at the moment, it implies this is a present action, so using "was reorganizing" in the past doesn't work here.

"He also sacrificed himself by not feeding over and over again on me" that sentence doesn't make sense to me, two comments on it
* He's immortal so how does he sacrifice himself, immortality doesn't work like that.
* He sacrificed himself by not feeding ? What's that, do you mean by not eating ? That would make much more sense, but still you didn't tell, did he not eat so she gets her fill or is he just stubborn ?

"My arms got goosebumps on them" you are making a critical choice of words with the description. Goosebumps aren't clothing to have them on your arms, simply say "i got goosebumps" that's all the readers need to know, no one'll ask where were the goosebumps and these fill all your body not only specific parts such as hands, legs or even spine.

Chapter 5 :

There was a lot of repetitions in this small paragraph. You are describing love, there is more to love then the touchy sensitive stuff. Where are all the feelings ?

Overall :

Every story had its theme, and own genre, but none of them seemed realistic, i mean we haven't seen much of the settings and surroundings, it was mainly the protagonist and someone they love, we didn't get description just a brief idea of what's happening. There were no names, nothing of that. I understand that these are short stories and the characters aren't gonna keep their adventures for the whole book, but if you want to write a short story, one chapter long, at least give the basic information in order not to confuse the readers.

I also suggest you consider visiting the word's wizards, aka our editing shop, to get some editing done.

I also noticed all your works are different versions of love, one is sweet, the other hurts, different sides there is to love. Try writing a chapter with the feelings, the confusion, the mess someone finds themself in when they're in love. Whenever you find a way to describe this, you would have found the real way to express love.

After reading the whole book, i am very triggered to why you decided to title the book "Life is a Superpower" if there is no such thing as shiny toys and magic, it is mostly dark love, or impossible things that you made seem possible, that is a good thing but the title and the chapters don't stick together much. Think something more like "impossible love" or anything that takes that meaning, also for the cover it's pretty empty it's a flower and then nothing. It doesn't embody the superpowers you were implying in the cover.

I hope you weren't disappointed with your work !