REVIEW DONE BY MaxwellStevens

First of all, the story is interesting. The author does not fail at all when it comes to delivering the story. Good job!

Let's talk about lengthes. ''Size doesn't matter'', they're all lying when they say that. The length of the chapters is very great. Not too short, not too long, just perfect.

Even though the storytelling is quite well mastered, some sentences are a bit long. Like when you're underwater and you're holding your breath. Maybe it would be better to break them in smaller sentences and use connectors to link them. On the other hand, some paragraphs are too... chunky. The sentences can be too short, and without any link. It feels a bit like reading with a robotic voice, or reading tiny chuncks barely glued together. It only happens a few times though, so it doesn't really have a bad impact on the overall experience.

When it comes to the technical part, well, it's pretty flawless. I didn't spot many typos. Actually, I've only spotted one typo in the 8 chapters I've read (counting the prologue), which was a ' instead of a '' in chapter 2. So, no big deal. At all.

I also noticed the almostperfect grammar. It wasn't hard at all to read, and the words flow nicely. And more importantly, the word choices are smart. I only regret a few repetitive things, such as the repeated use of a few words (don't worry, everyone does that when they like a word ;P).

What bothered me a bit was the old-fashioned use of genitive markers. For instance, I spotted ''Dokos' '' arm while I would have prefered to see ''Dokos's arm''. It's just a stylistic-thingy, and it's a pretty personal point of view, so I won't say this is a flaw at all.

The descriptions are really great. They're interesting and they're really well incorporated in the main story. I'd just like to see a few more. They're not bothering at all and didn't prevent me from getting hooked.

Despite what the author thinks, the dialogues are actually pretty interesting. They aren't bland at all. However, to improve the quality of the storytelling, I'd recommend adding little details reflecting the emotions of the different interlocutors. There already are some, but not spread evenly. Some parts are filled with these little details when others lack some.

The characters are really likeable and the humor isgreat. The story gave me good ol' sarcastic vibes. And I like that. However, it's a bit complicated to know what's going on in the characters' minds from time to time. The author doesn't share many of their thoughts and sometimes the story lacks actual depictions of emotions. Scattering some thoughts here and there (and also in the dialogue-oriented paragraphs) would improve the quality of the storry telling as well.

Sooooooo...

Here's the part y'all are waiting for...

Well I told you I liked the story. But more importantly, it was objectively good, despite the few flaws I mentioned above. I'd give it a 7,5/10. Thanks to @ChemicalChrist for submitting his very good story!