REVIEW DONE BY : SIMNIKIWE19

Plot: Let me make this very clear; I have never read an anime story before. Golden Pear is my first one, so my opinion on your plot could be a little erroneous. However, I have come to learn that anime is full of magic and wonder, and that nothing can ever really be that cliché or predictable. I must say, though, if Golden Pear were just a regular young adult novel without any out of the ordinary, magical stuff going on then it would fall under the list of Wattpad Clichés. Don't worry though, I'm getting to the good part. Let's say, for example, Golden Pear isn't an anime story and it's a cliché. I'd still read it. Want to know why? Well, first of all, your writing style is close to being immaculate, and secondly, romance is not Golden Pear's saving grace. Now, paired with its anime roots, Golden Pear's plot is not so predictable and cliché, in fact it's fresh and exciting, especially for people  like me who are new to anime. You've also done a stellar job in keeping the balance between the life of a high school kid who seems to be most people's least favourite person, and the magic and wonder which brightens up the world of anime. Hurrah for that!
Score: 10/10

Characters: Your characters are most things one would expect to find in a young adult novel: the mysterious, silent girl who gets harassed by her immature school mates; the spoilt brat who thinks that the entire world revolves around her; the charming boy with the perfect hair and toothpaste grin; the delinquent young man who comes off as intimidating; the gorgeous, slightly egotistic know-it-all who usually has to call people to order. These are five different characters with five different personalities and stories to tell. Although your characters aren't anything I've never come across in a book before (don't feel bad, something like this is unavoidable), I really enjoyed seeing them in action. Like I said before, you have a very eloquent way with your words and you take your readers places. Keep it up!
Score: 9/10

Grammar, spelling and punctuation: Most of your grammar, spelling and punctuation is correct, but there are a few mistakes you've made. Here's an example I took out of the first chapter: "Freya didn't notice or cared for their envious glances as she attended the best private school in the prefecture." You could've said: "Freya didn't notice or care for their glances as she attended the best private school in the prefecture." It's a small mistake, and I hardly spotted plenty of those while I was reading so you're not to worry! Just proofread your work every now and then, it helps you catch those nasty, little typos that writers hate.
Score: 8/10

Description: The way you describe Freya's surroundings and feelings is truly mesmerizing. I really love how you set the scene in the very first paragraph of chapter one. I could take a few tips from you.
Score: 9/10

Dialogue: Your dialogue is okay, although I would appreciate it if you made your readers aware of how your characters are feeling through the stuff they say and the way they say it. That way, you don't have to make use of adverbs to let us know that a character is upset or highly excited. Describing body language also helps. But the way you write is also okay and helps us read into situations.
Score: 8/10

Cover and blurb: Your cover and blurb are both spot on! Your cover supports the title and your blurb pulls readers in without giving too much away.
Score: 10/10

Overall story: Golden Pear is a good story that I'd definitely add to my library if I decided that I want to delve into anime. But I also love the fact that anyone can read it. When I was reading it, I wasn't reading it as an anime story; just an interesting book with a magical edge to it. If you could just work on those minor grammatical errors and your dialogue, your book really will be immaculate!
Score: 10/10

TOTAL SCORE: 64/70