Reviewer: Chaotic_Lals

Cover: 03/05

The picture's quality isn't so good. There is light reflecting on the girl's hair when it's clearly nighttime. The fonts do not go well either. You should remove the colon too. 'Amid the Blues of BcHaven' is the sub-title. It doesn't need a colon in the cover.

Title: 04/05

Honestly, I love the fact that you took it to coin a term of your own for the title of the book. The sub-title is good too. So yep, good job.

Synopsis: 06/10

While the synopsis conveyed a good amount of information enough to attract a reader, it had a lot of errors. This includes sentence constructions, punctuations, and tenses. I feel that you could've put together sentences differently . . . make them more convincing. For instance, in the first line, you say 'Impossible, only imaginable fantasies'. Here, as I said, the sentence could be improvised. Maybe you could merge the first sentence with this one? I love fantasies- the impossible, only-imaginable ones'. Don't you think it sounds better?

Moving onto the punctuations, just small errors really. After the first line by the speaker, you forgot to use a comma before the ending quotes.

Then, the tenses. You switched between tenses here and there. For instance, in the line 'I was saying to myself, it's past continuous tense. But, in the next line, 'This city leaves me gawking', you used the present tense. That's grammatically incorrect.

You also switched from British English to American English, which again, is wrong. In American English, you put commas or periods before the quotation marks whereas it's vice versa in British English; it's placed after the quotes. If you pay attention, you used British English towards the end of the blurb.

Other than these, the synopsis was not bad. Did not give away too much information, but not too less either- although I do feel that the title's explanation could be included in one of the chapters rather than the synopsis if the book.

Execution: 05/10

There are a lot of aspects that I feel could be improvised in this book. Starting off, I noticed that many of the ideas you had tried to convey did not come off as it was supposed to. Everything was too rushed. That's the main downside of the book. Then, you centralized some parts of the chapter- that's wrong in terms of a book's structure.

Plot: 13/20

To be frank, I think the book was really fast-paced.

Let's start with the prologue itself. One moment he was in the dining room, and the next, a death was reported to him?

There wasn't enough time to register everything happening in the book. Some of the ideas you were trying to convey weren't properly executed either- like I already mentioned above.

The plot in itself is a good one- only that you failed to execute it the right way. Again, it was too rushed. To sum it up, I did not get the head and tail of the plot in detail- it was too mundane.

Writing Style: 09/20

Like I already mentioned above, under 'Synopsis', there're are a lot of places where you could've improvised the way you put words together. They're also a lot of places where I noticed that you failed to convey particular ideas. I've mentioned this plenty of times- your writing style is too rushed. You know it's like . . . sitting in a fast-moving train and looking out the window- you cannot register anything; before you even understand the situation, it passes by. The main issue is that you do not describe it enough. With the way the book was written, I felt like I was reading out a report, you know? Something like lecture notes. It isn't entrancing enough. You don't have that 'way' with words. Provide more details especially when it comes to plot building scenes. Separate scenes. Take it slow- but do not lag the story.

Grammar & Vocabulary: 13/20

There were a lot of errors in grammar. First off, if you decide to write in the present tense, stick to it. Switching between present and past is both confusing and grammatically incorrect.

Then, you are to use a period after abbreviations like 'Mr.' or 'Mrs.'- you missed out on them in many places. You also fail to use commas where they are needed, and you use them where they aren't needed. You do not know when to break sentences and when to not.

Moving on to the vocabulary, it was not bad. The thing is, at many points, I felt like you could've used words that would've gone more with the context. It may not be 'wrong', but it was not suitable. For instance, in the prologue, when Baron asks whether she informed his family or not, you used the word 'feisty' to describe the tone- which did not go with the situation at hand.

Characters & Development: 06/10

The characters were not bad. The same goes for development. But, due to the writing style, the character profiles and their characteristics were unclear.

Total: 59/100

Final Note: To be frank, I expected a lot more from the book after having read the book. The book lacked in terms of clarity. The writing style is what ruined everything. Too rushed.

However, please do not be discouraged. I do not mean to convey any offense through this review. I am simply trying to help you here. If you edit out your errors & improvise more, you'll get there. Don't hesitate to hit me up if you have any queries regarding this review J My DMs are open for ya <3