Book: Catalina Gonzalez

Editor: septicbooperdooper

Client: _rae_21

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Tautology
This is when you express the same information twice, example:
"Fell down" you made it clear the paper fell, so you don't need to express the word "down".

Conciseness
Words like "really", "obviously", and "actually" are not needed in some sentences. If it doesn't add anything, and the sentence makes sense without it, then remove it. Example:

'The owner of this room must be obsessed with the colour white'
Flows better then 'The owner of this room must really be obsessed with the colour white'

Wording:
"In order too" is used often. You can just use "too" to shorten
"Thanks, Carolina, you are a darling," Veronica said while giving her a hug." You can replace with "'Thanks Carolina, you are a darling,' Veronica said while hugging her"

Flow:
I suggest in future books to re-read chapters to make sure they flow the way you like it.

Tenses:
"And how's that got to do with me?" should be "And what's that got to do with me?"

Grammar:
I've only found a few instances of mispunctuation. For example "Mrs" should end in a fullstop, as it's an abreviation of a name.

"Although, detective Cullen do call her sometimes to check on her..." should be "Although, detective Cullen does call her sometimes to check on her..." because of the subject-verb agreement.