Today I'm reviewing Queen_WordVomit's character Nicholas Drift from her book, Escape: The Test. The above is what I came up with based on descriptions.

Design Critique: For the design, there wasn't much to go off of, there wasn't quite a uniform idea of what he looked like. While this can work, this world is too alien to grasp at straws. For example, Giselle (So sad) had a good description. I was able to get a good idea of her and how she looked. With Nick, there definitely needs to be more of a description of him later on. Also, sorry I made him look quite a bit older then he should be...

Story: The story is very interesting and original (to some degree)! I like how we a quickly thrown into the world, giving a truely real experience. However, it is a bit confusing. I'm still trying to figure out the test, who started it, and why. But that is also a good thing, it gives interest and I want to read more to find out what else happens! Nick's quick flashback gives some sense of what the stakes are and what kind of world this is. However, I do think you bounce around a bit too much, and sometimes I wasn't sure where perspective changed. But so far the story is interesting and I can't wait to see more! I love the character dynamics and their thoughts seem completely human.

Others: Once again, I'm not always sure where perspective changes and am confused at points. You should separate different people speaking into different paragraphs, though you do do this later in chapter 2, so keep doing that.

Improved Bio: I don't really know what to improve, that may also be do to the lack of what we know about this character. Keep up the good work though!