Winner Winner Chicken Dinner
Hello everyone,
We FMCians are back again and this time with the winners.
Truly speaking, each and every OS was superbly written, may it about emotions or your imagination skills!
Some stories made us cry, some made compelled us to make an "aww" face, and some made us think about the emotions/feelings we neglected!
All in all, it was an enjoyable experience for us, and I hope it was for the writers as well as readers too.
The readers, who voted on the story, a big thank you to you all, and also to the judges recruited for judging and of course, the other members of FMC who helped us one way or another.
Your judges were:
Before we proceed, if you remember, I mentioned about the rewards for participants, right?!
Let's reveal the rewards now, shall we?!
√ Each participant will get a review of their OS from our side.
√ If you publish this OS in the near future, your OS book will be added in our, reading list under the "Participants" category.
√ Your OS will be published in our Appreciation Book, under your name, but just for 48 hours while the winner's OS will be there permanently!
Dear, the song you chose "Tutte na tutte na, saath hamara chute na" is taken from film 'Andaaz' which was released in the year 1949.
And as e mentioned in the starting if the contest that the songs you use in the OS should be only and only from the 90's era, i.e., from 1990 to 2000.
So as per the rules, unfortunately, we had to disqualify your entry.
But as a participant, you would still get your reward. 🤗
Now without any further ado, let's get started!
OS name: Stranger
Judged by satchitanandini
Name & title: 2
The title was almost apt to the OS written. It was about how two strangers become cupid for one another. The title was apt as it was two strangers who played a great role in Manik and Nandini's love story that had come to a halt.
Song Chosen: 2
The song was perfect. It was how strangers meet, become an integral part of one another's life; even if it is for a moment, and then they go on their ways. But even if they are not with us the moment spent with them becomes a lifetime memory. The song conveys the same and was the right choice for the OS or vice versa.
Emotional Connect: 1.5
One can definitely connect emotionally to this story. Everybody got their happily ever after. One must understand that not only living together but, dying together or moving on and finding love is also happily ever after. Cabir and Navya became one forever which was bigger than any forever. Manik and Nandini too met and their anniversary was complete. Mukti moved on with Zubin, finding love yet again. This is one type of story where one will be having tears and yet a smile would be lingering on their lips.
Creativity: 1.5
The concept of separation was not something new. LDR (Long Distance Relationship) problems are common. The only thing that was creative was Mukti playing Cupid for Manik while Cabir reprised his role as one. Overall it was a creative attempt but Cabir being Cupid to either Manik or Nandini was cliché.
Grammar / Sentence Structure: 1
The grammar was almost to the point. A few places the commas were missing. In a few sentences and was not in upper case after the full stop. Some sentences need reconstruction or else you're good.
TOTAL SCORE: 8/10
Judged by __ThelazyAatma
Title (2/2)
You are pretty good with your title, it gives a reader an idea about how your one-shot is going to be. So well done.
Song chosen ( 2/2 )
The song chosen was apt for the one-shot.
Emotional connect ( 1.5/2 )
To be honest, I really liked the plot, and I can feel myself getting connected. But at some points, the story lacked a bit.
Creativity ( 2/2 )
The story is very creative and smooth.
Grammar and sentence ( 2/2 )
You have a good vocabulary of grammar. Keep it up 💙
Total: 9.5
Judged by: hamesha_and_forever
Title: 2/2
The story is about 4 strangers and how meeting each other change their life. So the title is really apt for the story.
Song chosen : 2/2
The song clearly depicts the whole theme.
Emotional connect: 2/2
The readers could clearly understand the emotions and inner turmoil of the character.
Creativity: 1.5/2
The storyline was brilliant. The song and story really go along. The only problem was the scene of Mukti and Zubin should be given after the accident.
Grammar and sentence structure: 2/2
The writer has clearly know how to play with words and also has a good command of the language.
Total: 9.5
Judged by: KaynatK01
Name / Title of the os: 1/2
The title of your story could have been more intresting than just a word stranger.
Song chosen : 2/2
The song chosen for the situation perfectly fits and I personally love that song
Emotional connect: 2/2
If ask me I could really connect to your story through that song, You wrote really well by portraying the song, by finding its deep meaning behind it and making it a beautiful story
Creativity: 2/2
There was creativity it wasn't some normal cliche stories. The thought was the same but you portrayed it differently that sometimes some strangers do come in our life and change it like this.
I liked your dialogues too you worked really hard on them.
Grammar structure: 1.5/2
So cutting your mark here just because there was little grammatical error just because of that neither, The story was best.
Total: 8.5/10
Os name: None
Judged by: satchitanandini
Name & Title: 0
The OS doesn't have a title. A title would have made the OS more attractive and better. The direct start was disappointing.
Song Chosen: 2
The song chosen was apt for the situation of the OS. At times, we tend to lose our loved ones at the most unexpected time, and we're not ready to accept the reality. Ritesh Raheja also faces the same thing after losing Shivanya. This song is of one lover who is questioning the other why he/she left him/her. Even Ritesh is doing the same.
Emotional Connect: 1.5
I could very well connect with the OS emotionally. It just says that life is so uncertain. One moment Ritesh is talking to Shivanya and next moment he hears her death news. That's really devastating and also gives a reality check to all of us. The concept was nice.
Creativity: 1.5
The concept of losing once partner and living with memories is a common OS concept. But the way it was portrayed was nice. A little more of something different would have been better.
Grammar / Sentence Structure: 1
The grammar was incomplete. I would not say it was missing but it was not up to the point too. I'm okay with the usage of Hindi but adding English translation would have been better as all readers don't know Hindi. Even there were spelling errors in Hindi. Keep that in mind while typing.
TOTAL MARKS: 6/10
Judged by: __ThelazyAatma
Title (0/2)
No title!
Song chosen (1/2)
You could choose another song too. It didn't match with the situation.
Emotional connect ( 0/2)
Your story was emotional but I couldn't be connected to the story.
Creativity (1/2)
Needs improvement
Grammar and sentence ( 1/2)
Seems like you didn't check the os after completing it. It has many errors.
Total: 3
Judged by: hamesha_and_forever
Title: 0/2
There is no title at all.
Song chosen: 2/2
The chosen song was successful in showing the emotions of the protagonist.
Emotional connect: 2/2
The writer showed the emotions of the protagonist clearly.
Creativity: 1.5/2
The flashback and the way Rithik hallucinate Shivanya and all was really nice.
Grammar and sentence structure: 1/2
The writer has used Hindi and English sentences simultaneously. Grammar was good, but the sentences were broken to form another para.
Total: 6.5
Judged by: KaynatK01
Title of the os: 0/2
Your story didn't have any title so cutting marks here.
Song chosen : 1.5/2
The song you chose was good enough but your storyline was totally emotional So a bit more emotional song could have suited more.
Emotional connect: 1/2
I am a big 90's lover but personally I don't find this song emotional there are many sad songs in the 90's era that would be perfect for your story. So the connection was half-half.
Creativity: 1/2
The story was the same as others
I couldn't find any creativity. The theme was set to bring out the creativity in the writers but all I found was the same plots which we read in typical one-shots or fanfictions.
Grammar structure: 1.5/2
The grammatical errors were less.
Total: 5/10
Os name: Kahi Pyaar Na Ho Jaye
Written by: manumystery
Judged by: satchitanandini
Name & Title: 1
The title of the song is the title of the OS. A title other than this would have been more attractive and interesting.
Song Chosen: 2
The song indicates that the lead character doesn't want to fall in love fearing the consequences. It fits the bill of the OS. Also, the second song which Manik renders at the birthday party correctly conveys his feelings and emotions. You've selected the right songs.
Emotional Connect: 1
When Nandini's reason for reluctance and rejection is revealed, I couldn't feel the stir of emotions that one had to feel. Either the reason was too cliché or the way it was put up was blunt. The reason could have been more strong.
Creativity: 0.5
In this concept, the protagonist Manik falls for his happy go, lucky classmate, Nandini. He never has the guts to confess. Later when he meets her at Mukti's wedding she is a changed person. This was cliché and not at all a strong reason. Soha being the vamp was like cherry on the top. The reason for Nandini's rejection could have been much better even after knowing Manik hasn't moved on from his love for her.
Grammar / Sentence Structure: 0.5
You will really have to work on your grammar. There is no punctuation except for the full stop at some places. The use of ellipses in the dialogues were unwanted. You could have used an editor to make the grammar better which makes the presentation pleasant.
TOTAL MARKS: 5/10
Judged by: __ThelazyAatma
Title ( 2/2)
Appropriate Title it is 💙
Song chosen ( 2/2)
The song chosen was apt for the theme 💙
Emotional connect ( 0/2 )
I couldn't feel connected to your one shot.
Creativity ( 1/2 )
Well tried but you can improve more.
Grammar and sentence ( 1/2 )
There were many grammatical mistakes and it troubled me a lot while reading.
Total: 6/10
Judged by: hamesha_and_forever
Title: 1.5/2
The title and the song chosen was the same.
Song chosen: 2/2
Both the song was chosen was apt for the theme.
Emotional connect: 1/2
There are lots of Characters in the story but the bond wasn't that clear.
Creativity: 1.5/2
The writer was able to portrait both the protagonist's pov. But the story was little stretched
Grammar and sentence: 1.5/2
The writer has used both Hindi and English and ellipsis has used when there is no need of it.
Total : 7.5
Judged by: KaynatK01
Title of the story: 1/2
The title of your story didn't match as the plot was different from what your title is.
Song chosen: 1/2
You have chosen 2 songs one is "Kahin Pyaar Na Hojaye" and one is Mera "dil bhi kitna pagal" hai
The first song, to be honest, didn't match with your story I felt it was kind of boring to put.
But when you Mera Dil Bhi Kitna Pagal hai your story got a new way because that song suited well to your story.
Emotional connect: 1.5/2
I felt emotional connect only with the second song Mera dil bhi kitna pagal hai as it showed well Manik's love towards Nandini
Creativity: 1.5/2
The story was similar but I found you have written in another way and there was one scene which I like the most was when Manik sing that song and he speaks his love to Nandini finally with the help of a song. So you showed your creativity there very well.
Grammar structure: 0.5/2
Am sorry dear but in the future, you have to work very well in your grammar because you had a lot of grammatical errors and please my dear remember this using of excessive dots (......) is considered as a grammatical mistake and your story had this plenty times so just your marks would be cut here.
Total:5.5
Os Name: A Fated Encounter
Written by: Sleepy_headd
Judged by: satchitanandini
Name & Title: 1.5
The title was good for the OS. Two Frenemies who were separated because of their respective careers meet unexpectedly one day. But instead of fated it could have been unexpected. That would have been more apt.
Song Chosen: 1
Parth and Niti have known each other and are not meeting for the first time. So they are not unknown or Anjaane. They meet during unexpected circumstances and develop a great bond amidst all tiffs. And finally, they go on their paths, memories afresh in their minds. But they are not Anjaane. So that didn't work out for me as it seemed like a reunion and not the first meet.
Emotional Connect: 2
I could emotionally connect to the OS. It was a beautiful bond between a doctor and an agent who are nemesis. You had portrayed the emotions well. Parth cooking for Niti and the latter waiting to go home to meet him was nice. Their feelings for each other did not love and they would see if fate brings them together.
Creativity: 2
All stories don't have a happily ever after is what the song conveys. This story was left incomplete as some stories are meant to be incomplete. It was very creative. The cherry on the cake was Parth and Niti instead of Manik and Nandini.
Grammar / Sentence Structure: 1
Your grammar was to the point in most of the places. The only disappointment was that there was no usage of double quotes for dialogues. It helps the person know which is the dialogue and which is the expression. Only that was a drawback. Overall your language had a good flow.
TOTAL MARKS: 7.5/10
Judged by: __ThelazyAatma
Title (2/2)
The title is a really beautiful and creative one.
Song chosen (2/2)
Good choice 💙 I really like it
Emotional connect (2/2 )
The plot is really good and you portrayed everything so smoothly.
Creativity (2/2)
A fantabulous shot. Just the suggestion is proofread.
Grammar and sentence ( 2/2)
I must say you are pretty good with your words and grammar. Keep it up
Total: 10/10
Judged by: hamesha_and_forever
Title: 2/2
The title was short and catchy.
Song chosen : 1/2
In the story, the Protagonist weren't strangers.
Emotional connect: 1/2
The first half of the story was clearly described. But towards the end, the storyline is a little bland.
Creativity: 1.5/2
The story is interesting. How two frenemies meet in an unexpected situation and how their view change about each other.
Grammar and sentence structure: 1.5/2
The writer has a good command of the language but the narration and dialogues were mixed.
Total: 7/10
Judged by: KaynatK01
Title of the story: 2/2
You worked really hard on the title and it matched well with your story.
Song chosen : 2/2
Again you worked hard on your song too as it was best for your story
Emotional connect: 1/2
Though your song was strong I couldn't feel emotionally connected because the story was moving on one side and the song was moving on the other side.
Like the lines of the song, sometimes were not matching with scenes so that's why the touch was missing in your story
Creativity: 1/2
Coming to creativity yes it had creativity but the thing was your story moved in fast motion and sometimes the I got confused as what is happening?
For example Why Parth had to stay at Niti's house? Like for a night okay letting an old friend stay but why for days? No reasons! Many things were unreasonable and unjustified as it was looking like the writer was in quite a rush to end the story
Grammatical structure: 1.5/2
Your vocabulary was excellent. I really appreciate the work behind it.
And your grammar is good because I had to work hard to find mistakes from your story but one or two mistakes too counts as an error so cutting half mark there.
Total: 7.5/10
OS name: Dil hai ki maanta nahi
Written by: manansamkhan
Judged by: satchitanandini
Name & Title: 1
The title and the name of the song were the same. It could have been creative and different. It didn't pique my interest.
Song Chosen: 1.5
I liked the selection of songs but it could have been better. The theme song was apt to the situation but the concert songs could have been better. Both the bands performed on romantic numbers. One could have performed on a peppy number and it would have been different from cliché.
Emotional Connect: 1
Manik and Nandini love each other's voice first and then each other. But nowhere was it shown how their emotions grew. It all seemed too rushed. The last song would have been perfect only if somewhere the emotions were properly portrayed. Only the love for each other's voice was shown.
Creativity: 1
Manik and Nandini being a part of different music bands and Fab5 winning Musicana has been too monotonous. You could've tried something different as the theme was also different.
Grammar / Sentence Structure: 0
The OS lacked basic grammar. Sentences seldom had full stops. Many words were written in the mobile language. Plz, for please be good for texting but when in a story it is very irritating to read it. So the next time concentrate on the basic grammar glitches. Also don't write any dialogue or important part in capitals unnecessarily. It can be bold or in italics but not in capitals.
TOTAL MARKS: 4.5/10
Judged by: __ThelazyAatma
Title ( 1.5 / 2 )
You could be more creative
Song chosen ( 2/2 )
Nice one
Emotional connect ( 1/2 )
The shot is confusing with many characters and I couldn't feel connected.
Creativity (1/2)
You should improve.
Grammar and sentence ( 1/2 )
It needs high editing. The wrong punctuation and the lack of sentence construction.
Total: 6.5
Judged by: hamesha_and_forever
Title: 1/2
The title is the song used in the os.
Song chosen : 1/2
The song chosen isn't that apt for the OS.
Emotional connect: 1/2
3 songs have been used in the os but the song doesn't have an emotional connection with the story.
Creativity: 1/2
The story was stretched unwantedly and also there is a lot of unwanted dialogues too.
Grammar and sentence structure: 1.5/2
The grammar was good.
Total: 5.5
Judged by: KaynatK01
Title of the story story 1/2:
The title of your story could be a lot more good than the original one!
Song chosen : 1/2
The song which you chose didn't totally match your story.
Like, when you portrayed the scene of Nandini accepting his proposal that's when this song comes but the lines didn't match with the situations well.
Emotional connect: 1/2
Only in the second stanza, I could connect your story to the song neither I couldn't emotionally connect myself with the story
Creativity: 1/2
The creativity was less. The concept was not new plus the story literally was on the fast track.
Grammatical structure: 1/2
Dear, you have to work a lot on your grammatical errors as there were lots.
Total: 5/10
OS Name: Loving you
Written by: YandereMania
Judged by: satchitanandini
Name & Title: 2
The title was apt for the OS. It about an Afro-American 14-year-old boy who is saved by a guy. So he loves him. The love is romanticized but at a very profound level. The title suits this One-sided love story of the boy who has his own flaws but is still happy about them.
Song Chosen: 1
You've chosen songs by famous singers but, what are the names? Except for one song the rest of the songs' names haven't been mentioned. Not everybody listens to Michael Jackson or Jenny Han. Mentioning the names of the so ga would have been better.
Emotional Connect: 1
I could feel the emotions of a one-sided lover who wishes he could have got his friend as his boyfriend. The guy knows he won't get his friend back even as a friend but still wants to be his boyfriend. But one thing was never known, why the friend abandoned the boy? As I read the boy suffers from multiple disorders; I'm assuming that it was the reason for it. Also choosing certain lines from multiple songs was good but at the same, it was a little jumbled.
Creativity: 2
These are weird fantasies and one needs guts to pen down such feelings. I must say you've done a great job. The topic you've chosen is sensitive yet the need of the hour. So keep it up.
Grammar / Sentence Structure: 1
The spacing between the paragraphs was really bad. One needs time to make out if it is a poem or a letter. So the next time does make sure that you have enough space between paragraphs. Instead of making long paragraphs, you could have made it short. The references have also been messed up and the lack of spacing plays a major glitch again.
TOTAL MARKS: 7/10
Judged by: __ThelazyAatma
Title ( 2/2)
Nice one
Song chosen (0/2)
The song is good but you had to choose the 90s song.
Emotional connect (1.5/2)
It should be more intriguing but I liked it. You tried very well.
Creativity (1/2)
You can improve yourself. I'm not that convinced.
Grammar and sentence ( 1.5/2 )
Overall it was a pleasant read through still needs high editing and improvement in your grammar.
Creativity ( 1 / 2 )
The story can be a bit more creative.
Grammar and sentence ( 1/2)
Grammar wasn't really up to the mark . You really need to improve your grammar.
Total: 8/10
Judged by: hamesha_and_forever
Title: 1.5/2
The title was simple but catchy.
Song chosen: 1/2
The song chosen isn't that apt for the OS.
The writer has quoted so many songs.
Emotional connect : 1.5/2
The writer used/quoted songs to mention the protagonist's emotion. It was nice
Creativity: 2/2
The theme was good. And the idea too was different
Grammar and sentence structure: 1/2
The grammar was good. But it will be difficult for the readers to understand whether it is a narration or dialogue.
Total: 7/10
Judged by: KaynatK01
Title of the os: 1.5/2
The title matched with your story but could have been more attractive
Song chosen : 1/2
So you chose some Hollywood songs which were ok no offense but dear you chose multiple songs which were getting hard to differentiate. If you would have chosen one song or at least mentioned their names that would have been better.
Emotional connect: 1/2
I am sorry dear but I couldn't feel emotionally connected with the story through songs. But I felt your story was attractive because the theme of your os was very touching
Creativity: 2/2
Though it was a mix up of songs The only thing in your story was creativity. You did something new, something fresh which most of the people just think and don't write but I would really appreciate you for that.
Grammatical Structure: 1.5/2
Grammar was strong but some errors were found in your story so cutting marks.
Total: 7/20
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Readers score: 79
Judges score: 35.5
Average score: 57.25
Readers score: 64
Judges score: 20.5
Average score: 42.5
Readers score: 60
Judges score: 24
Average score: 42
Readers score: 53
Judges score: 32
Average score: 42.5
Readers score: 58
Judges score: 21.5
Average score: 39.75
Readers score: 49
Judges score: 27
Average score: 38
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I think its crystal clear from the above scores who is the winner!
Isn't it???
But still, a little bit of the drama in life is necessary right?!
So why now announce the winner like the winner announcement in reality shows!
So the winner is.....
Any guesses?????
(Though you all know😂😂)
Winner is
👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏
Congratulations girl!!!!! You truly deserve it!
Now coming to the runner ups.
1st Runner up
2nd Runner up
Congratulations to all three of you!
👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏
Your badges are published in our new book "Leja Shavashiyan... Oye Thoko Taaliyan"
You'll get to know more about the book there!
But before going the winner and runner ups, i think you have read the title before continuing to read further right, if not read it now!
And do tell the us the venue, where you people are going to give us treat! After Qurantine 😂🙈
Special thanks to all the judges and neha-pani _khusiyaan_ sumani3456
for helping us with tallying the scores.
To those people who didnt win today or who wanted to participate, don't worry, FMC isn't going anywhere neither are you people!
Till then,
Keep laughing,
Keep reading,
Keep writing.
Tataaa
#Musicophilias
FMC 🎶💙
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