Reviewed by Kenerelda

Author:  XXRagingFireXX
Title: The girl in the hijab

Cover: 4/5 

It could've been better but it's pretty.

Blurb: 3/5

The words used are good and no noticeable mistakes but it fails to interest the reader to read the book. It's very cliché with the idea like a girl in trouble who just wants normal. There are many books on wattpad having similar blurbs, almost majority of books have the same kind of blurbs like a girl in trouble wants normal life. That's how common the idea is. But good job with the blurb.

Title: 4/5 

Nice title you have. Well thought, matches with the cover.

Plot: 5/10

The plot is plain uninteresting. I apologize for being blunt but it's plain and uninteresting. The plot is being developed in a very poor quality which makes it harder to read and cringy at the same time. What it is really going to be about judging by the already published chapters is very predictable and common. The first paragraph in the first chapter just ticked me off the tracks unwilling to read any further. The plot also has a few minor holes in.

Character development: 6/15

The first paragraph in first chapter. That one sentence reflects the entire character of Nadia which in first chapter itself is destroyed. Try to impress your readers with the main character if the plot of your story is highly common. People just not only like strong female characters but make her a beauty with brains, not some chick who's completely ignorant and arrogant. The main character is being bullied and stuff, cool, appearance of the characters? Not introduced. The other side characters who seem important are also poorly developed that it feels you're just rushing things. Work on them. If you're going to write it with the point of view of Nadia then you better get on a personal level with her to better understand and execute the words flowing, weaving them into inviting paragraphs that make pretty chapters.

Spelling and Grammar: 5/10

Grammar is nuts. It interferes with the flow of reading. It's makes it cringy to read when you find no proper punctuations. Imagine your favourite book with loads of grammatical errors and how cringy it would become to read. Would you even read a book with those many errors that disturb the flow?
Exactly.

Overall: 5/10

The book has so much potential along with the idea but it is very poorly executed. When reading a book, it should give off the feeling of wanting to turn the page, what's coming next. Curiosity to know more about the story and characters which your book lacks in. As a result, the readers have to read it forcefully. The cover, title you choose are pretty but the moment your blurb is in action, interest starts to lose its points. Further proceeding to read a chapter, the first paragraph of first chapter leaves a bad impression. If she's not willing to study biology why take the subject? Not interested in developing and further progressing in medical stuff then why take the subject?? It somehow just ticked me off. I apologize but no offense.

Further proceeding into the next two chapters, it was evidently boring. It felt forced. Try using descriptions of the surroundings with different words, increase your vocabulary so as to write better descriptions for the characters, for the action, for the mischief. Work on them. As well as the character Nadia is developing, it's plain ignorant and doesn't leave any big impacts nor does it leave any good impressions.

The idea has great potential, if you make an effort to make it right, it'll be so much better. 

That's all. 

Kira.