Reviewed by Key Keeper Juliette Dragonrat703

Author: Heart_of_Dandelions
Title: Was it Fate?
Genre: paranormal

Cover 5/5

Your cover is very intricate and detailed, and I love its combination of mystery and nostalgia. The font is unique and interesting, and it's big and bold enough to catch people's attention. Great job!

Blurb 4/5

In addition to hinting at the plot of the story, the blurb conveys the tone of the work as well. It's mostly very good, although it is vague enough that you might want to specify more of the plot or characters. However, this is optional, as the story does well with the plot being gradually revealed.

Title 4/5

The title asks a question of the readers, which is a good way to lure them in. It fits well with the theme of the story since these characters' lives are slowly being drawn together in a fate-like way. It doesn't immediately convey the genre of the book, but the cover and blurb provide that and overall I really like it.

Plot 9/10

Overall, the plot was very well done and unique. Daisy and Oliver's story is a bit slow, with a lot of focus on character development over plot. I personally love your focus on characters, and despite the slowness I could feel the rising mystery. I liked the scene with Quinn, which helped move the plot forward while Daisy and Oliver's life is still being established. You could spend a bit less time setting up their lives because many readers like to get into the heart of the plot right away, although I must say that I loved these details and really liked learning about them. This book was a refreshing break from many of the cliche fantasy stories, and I was extremely impressed by your spin on the spirit world and gods and goddesses. These tropes are often overused, but you've managed to bring them to life again in a way I didn't think was possible.

Character development 14/15

You establish relationship dynamics right away in a very clear and engaging way. This is the story's main focus, so I'm happy to report that it was done excellently. Oliver's concern for Daisy is very touching, and Daisy's disdain for him is entertaining. I also loved Gray and Oliver's friendship. The banter between the different characters is fun to read, although you might want to distinguish more between each character's banter, as sometimes it can sound the same. Daisy's deadpan responses to people are one of the best aspects of the story, and you did excellently at causing your characters to make me laugh (Alexandria and Daisy's "What's up?" conversation was the funniest so far).

Spelling and grammar 9/10

Just some small, easily fixable mistakes. Make sure to proofread before you publish. There was nothing that interrupted my enjoyment of the story.

Overall 9/10

The story is extremely original and unique and your characters have great dynamics. Cleaning up your grammar mistakes will make this story great. I wouldn't be surprised if it got published one day.

Love Juliette