Reviewed by: -jolyne

Author: Fantasies-N-TeaIn20s
Title: One Breath Closer To Death
Genre: Action/Adventure.

Cover : 4 / 5 

Neat concept ! The font could be adjusted and the place where your author name is could be adjusted as well.

Blurb : 2 / 5 

The first part doesn't really flow well and already there are grammar issues. 

Title : 4 / 5 

Neat title , but may I suggest "One Breath Closer to Death" in your title line.

Plot : 8 / 10 

A bit slow and hard to follow.

character development : 14 / 15

- starts off really strong in the beginning, but it's a bit shaky in the middle 

Spelling and grammar : 5 / 10 

Awkward transitions are seen and there's a lot of places where it really doesn't flow 

Overall : 6 / 10 

Honestly . I'd suggest to take off that very first chapter. take any sort of criticism , and be ready for it. It can only help you. and, even if someone says " it sucks, here's why : x, y, and z," it's just a free critique ! and if they're just straight - up haters , just politely comment , hey that's not cool or ignore them

And definitely edit / proofread as you go. It'll only get you more readers that way since no one likes to read an un-edited manuscript.