Reviewed by Key-Keeper Ava Avocados12

Title: Dance of The Light and Shadows
Author: JohanValentine

The title looks awesome with the black and white words but the image is a bit boring.

Blurb:
5/5

The blurb is great! It is interesting and makes readers think.

Title:
2/5

The title is a bit of a mouthful. Try thinking of something shorter, for example I think the word ‘the’ is
unnecessary.

Plot:
7/10

The plot is interesting. It will be interesting to follow Kaelar through his endeavour.

Character Development:
12/15

Your character development is good. I liked the Daria immediately. The only thing I suggest is emotions.
You need to add emotions to the characters, for example was the elf that caught the Daria scared when
she appeared behind her?

Spelling and Grammar:
7/10

There are a few mistakes but nothing proof reading can’t fix! Just remember that the names of species
need capitals, for instance, Daria.

Overall:
7/10

Other Comments:

This plot has interesting, creative characters that are intriguing to readers.

Your strength:  Description.

Each character and scene is exquisitely delineated with gorgeous detail. It makes the reader feel as
though they have been transported into this fictional world.

Your weakness: Emotions.

Even is third person, emotions are crucial! They trap the reader because emotions humanise characters
and make readers care, causing them to read on.

Overall, your story is centred on a great idea and will blossom into something beautiful.

-Key-keeper Ava