Heyy Candies,
It's me again. How are y'all doing?
Well this SWEET book I'm going to be reviewing is from a very SWEET special person, who happens to have bounty as their favourite. That SWEET person is none other than thriller_mystry_.
This person is the writer of Her Secret Mission, I honestly love this book😂 it makes my tumtum jolly.
I'm going to be reviewing this book under the following headings.

Characters development:
Each character developed at their own pace, and I absolutely love each and everyone of them. I love the fact that you gave the readers an idea of each of the characters by having a characters list...
I love Elizabeth, she reminds me of myself actually and a lot of people. Her demeanor is very elegant.
Most situations in life make us to become very tough...
And I love the other characters, each of them have their own unique personality and contributions to the book. I honestly love thriller books... It's a 5/5

Plot development: The plot developed sequentially and not haphazardly... It progressed at its own pace, and I love the fact that you switched POVs...like niceee
Then I also love the fact that you have your own style of writing...I love the fact that it's not all that serious cause you added comic reliefs
I laughed hard when I figured out that Elizabeth drives at the age of 14 with a fake ID...that means she must really have a good stature😂
I felt sad when her family was killed...
The way you started the book got me intrigued, and I was completely hooked.
Your book gives off this unexplainable Aura and energy...
It gives off the right kind of vibes.
This book has everything, I give it 9.5/10

Book cover: OMG, I literally love the book cover😂🤧🖤
It fits the book perfectly and gives off the right message. I love it so much
5/5

Grammatical erorrs:
You did well with the punctuations, although I did notice these minor errors...
I noticed sometimes that after a full stop, the beginning of the next word isn't capitalised. It would be nice if you cross check, especially in chapter 1- The dreams.

Sooo to avoid wasting time, the corrections are in bold and brackets
If you don't understand anything, let me know
Here we go!

The Dream:

Dad and mum turn in his direction to see what is wrong.

After 2 good minutes of staring at my target, dad asks... (I think this fits better)

"Honey even your elder brother used to play with cars at this age, but you are shooting targets". (I think this fits better)

"Don't you want to play with your doll, Stella?" (Stella is in apposition to doll, so there should be a comma)

"And you son, you are gonna...until you hit it in the middle." (punctuation)

"I wasn't cooking anything dear, abd even if I was..."
(Punctuation and I think "I wasn't" would fit better)

"A-Ace," ( you actually put a double comma here)

Those people waited for mum and Dad to go down, before they added the petrol and also set the place on fire.(I think this would fit better).

I scream loudly everytime... (This is a better adverb)

There were medium sized trees...

Tears fall like water down my cheeks, everything gets blurry. (Punctuation)

I'm utterly useless here. Mum, Dad and Ace are all helping each other, and I'm just a crying mess.
(Punctuation)

I turn to see 3 people, the guys who spoke had the looks of a 16yr old. (I think this would fit better).

And the other guy who looks like like a 17yr old.

"WHO ARE YOU!" I scream, with tears streaming down my cheeks(punctuation and I think this would fit better)

States the eldest, walking in the direction of the Middle guy with his sister.(not he's)

I run in the direction of the other two siblings while taking out my gun(this would fit better)

I shoot right where...(this is better)

The fall to their knees screaming. Using that chance, I take out the pocket knife and stab them both in their gut. (Punctuation and this fits)

I slid the knife through their eyes and then their right pulse.
They would eventually die on their own, and the ambulance would never arrive in time. (Punctuation and this would fit)

After everything, I run back to the house taking my weapons with me, and hoping my family would survive.

This little hope was all in vain as the only people I see are; the agency, manager, uncle Xavier and aunt Rain.

I wake up with a startle.

Ever since that... I have been having problem sleeping.

After I'm done, I get out of the bathroom and take a...vest, toss it on the bed, and then wear a loose black hoodie.
It doesn't...

I take two keys before opening the garage.

If it was me, I would just...

When you're on a bike, it's just like you're completely free with no danger ahead. (not your)

It feels like you're trapped and hidden (still not "your")

I get in, open the side compartment and take out a dagger which I keep inside my book. (Punctuation)

I dump the hoodie and sweatpants at the back of the seat, before turning the car on.

I race my car out of the garage for no reason, before checking the time and shaking my head at my stupidity. (This fits better)

I had come so far before realizing that I forgot my bandages at home.
(This is better)

Why are all bad things just happening in one day.

The have their own stupid thoughts on how we little kids...

When they think you're a pathetic little girl who can barely raise an arm, but then you make them...

Where do you think you're going sir?

Why do you think a girl would go right in front of the club?

He states with gritted teeth.

I just give a knockout punch

I wrong move, and I would be shut in the skull

Over my dead body will you be able to do that

I just kept quiet, I don't directly kill people.(punctuation)

Now, they all get alerted and start shooting. (Punctuation)

The next second I know, I'm stabbed in the hip.

And you should have been here to see the beautiful colours of blue, purple then black

To hold his baby, which...(not he's)
"What's the use, you're going to I'll me anyway" ( not "a")

"If you act like a good kid and tell me, I shall allow you to go home and tell your boss..." (Punctuation)

He says while trying to keep his breath steady, but looses (punctuation)

And a ball has been held there too for six days

We're going to have a new WHAT? (Chapter 2):

One holding a dirty 11yr old socks with a stick and pincher, and the other...(punctuation and this is better)

"Cooper, Caleb may I know what on Earth, you two were going to do to me?"

If eyes could kill, I know exactly the two idiots I'm going to test it on. (This fits better)

I'm completely fed up with these two

"Justin do you know what time it is?"

WOW, as if he knows...(punctuation)

Cooper, Caleb and Shally go to their dorms to pack their stuff, while I stay to question...(this would fit better)

I just laugh at his stupid...(not he's)
Staring at me as if their father...(this is better)

Her age will probably be 19 or 18 as we started to work on field (not feild)
And now wants another team to drift off with (not drift of)

"Are you seriously say that agent R zero 7 would be her?..."

Then why are they so happy?

He says, and his eyes shoot...(capitalization after a full stop, and his not he's)

Sally just kicks his shin...
But this time gets hit at the back of his head by his father.

He was an average guy, height 5 foot 8 and his eyes were (there's not meant to be any separation by ellipsis in the bolded words)

And why I will be like 3 minutes late...

I could feel the tension in their conversation

If I was there, I would fake laugh in his face (woah...the most corrections is all about the "he's") 😂)

That's why I like this guy(I think this fits better)

But Xavier hits the back of his head

Then, the blue green eyes guy spots be and freezes. I then realized that I haven't taken my lenses off(I think this fits better)

The blue green eyed guy elbows his friend...(not "eyes" and he's)

Suddenly spot me and become uneasy by my facial expression (not face expression)

Zander brings his hand forward...

I don't know why he calls it 'bro'...(I think the one in bold firs better)
I remove the black lenses, and put on the silver grey eyed one

They all flinch by his (I think you need to proofread to try find errors like this his and he's)

I slap it in his face
And the same time twitching his lips
With pure anger in his eyes(I think this fits better than the other)
And he tries to remove my hand...(you repeated to twice)

I almost shot, then realise...(punctuation and then)

Then they all come to their senses(then not than)

The guy falls to his knees...(the one in bold is a better fit)
That one stupid woman cries like a baby
The blue green eyed guy opens his  mouth in anger to avenge his stupid friend

And has good sarcasm too

They're just agents taught a little hacking and element of distraction (this fits better)

If we have to steal a phone from a drug dealer or mafia, he/ she will distract (punctuation and fits better)
Caleb really had to open his big mouth
Caleb's hand on his head and....

"DON'T EVER BRING UP HER FAMILY OR HER NAME" Zander states(not "then Zander states)

Zander tried all his best to move her hand(better)

Zander will calm her down, then

Getting ready for the mission(chapter 3):

They are just immature kids (not unmature... immature is applied to humans...
Well I don't know honestly...both are correct and can be used inter-dependently so it's also good, but immature sounds better in this context )

We need to discuss things (not thing's)

I reach the door and open it widely

You're the boss, can't...(not your)

Hey you okay?

He realized in Zander's voice that this isn't something daily, so he shut his

"Zander,it looks like you're squeezing her hurt arm"

Xavier we will call once we reach California (no need for "to")
Then I also put some weapons in my pocket too

So get yo ass in here if you wanna come
"Yo 13, are you sure you know the way or I should drive?"(meant to be a comma after 13 and should not shall)

"Well sir, it still doesn't change the fact that you have a little girl..."(not you'll)

Chapter 4 - Trying to get used to the teamates

"...4 water bottles and keep it on the table, then also removed some bananas and kept them on the counter" (this fits better)

Then jumped to bed

"...lemme tell you, guys won't MAGICALLY appear at times of trouble"

I didn't know how I dosed off...

"...and tie it into a loose messy bun before clipping it"

"Don't thank me, thank Cooper. He did this before getting drunk"

"if you were to get a surprise visit by your enemies, you would already be dead" (this fits better)

PS: I made some corrections through the inline comments in the book...
Check it out

Chapter 5(Attending the mafia ball pt 1):

I wake up with flashbacks and a startle as usual (this would fit better)

I say to myself then
Then it hits me

Like a kid... Disney world, I jump out of bed (punctuation)

He had an apologetic look but immediately masked it by shaking his head because I didn't answer.

While running, I realised that(punctuation)

To continue...running with me (there was no space between running and with)

Justin was gonna object, but I continued (this fits better)

Like we've spent 2 good days here, how would (this fits better)

But... we've literally (not littery)

She gives the bag a practical hit, which almost breaks cause of the force ( this fits better)

She skillfully hits the bag and if I had never hit that bag, I would think...(punctuation)

"...and she never slowed down at all. She just...(there's meant to be a full stop, and capitalisation after the full stop)

I've already used all the gym equipments so far, and I don't think I would ever want to torture that poor bag.(there's no need for "and" before "I've" and the one in bold fits better)

Before its chains break and there would be nothing left

I almost scream, but keep my voice in check. I think she..(punctuation and capitalisation)

Incase he breaks the one before(not "before one")

The voice asks (you repeated ask)

Let's cut to the chase
She didn't give the poor guy the chance to even say a word

And lastly, don't die/fail.
(There's meant to be a comma not full stop)

PS: since we've agreed for the corrections to be in the inline comments I'm going to stop this heading here and continue with the inline comments
Basically, the minor errors are the switching of "then" with "than" and "his" with "he's"
Then commas and some other minor stuffs

But then again, I just wanted to point out that an ellipsis is just three dots (...)
But I get your writing style, and love the book as it is.
Thank you for this amazing book!

General review:
Well... I love this book so much, I love the fact that you included mafias and stuff.
This book has everything and I totally recommend it to anyone...
It makes my tumtum dance with happiness 😂
This book is totally on point and y'all should try it out
Overall rating: 8.99/10

Off to read other books...

XOXO and candy,
Candy lover 😋🍭✨