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Title: Death Bound

Genre: Paranormal

Blurb: Death is an eventuality, But it doesn't have to be an ending. Somewhere between the realms of life and death lie the Bounds; a plane of existence separated from reality by no more than an illusion. It's a place rife with betrayal, deception and vicious traps that exist only to break the pitiful dead. Friends are untrustworthy. Family means ambush. Caring is a vulnerability. In the Bounds, it doesn't matter who you are or what you believe, We're waiting for you.

~~NEW SUMMARY~~

The face of Death isn't one that's easily forgotten.It is darkness and light, innocence with a perverse sense of justice, it's an abyss, yet it's more human than anyone you know. Death is unbridled fury and quiet sorrow; the ruler of all life.Cruel fate allows this being to crown themselves governor of the Bounds - the place after life with fragile ties that ground it just beyond reality's reach. It's where Stephen Emerson, a young London accountant, finds himself after he's gunned down just meters from his home and it's where an unsuspecting New York detective becomes caught up in a nightmarish situation with no escape.Problem is, Death likes company, and a seemingly impossible task ensures all those caught in the Bounds remain there forever. But this unlikely pair aren't going down without a fight, and their success might just shake apart the delicate foundations of this unreal realm.

Status: Ongoing

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Starting Points: 30

Cover: Y'all! This is the greatest cover I've seen yet! At least among the books I've reviewed in BHR! I'm screaming, it is close to perfection. I would click the shit out of this book if I saw it in my recommended list. The tone reverberating off of it is enough to give me a life-lasting boner! I have been deliverT! No points lost at all! I may just give you all of them!

-Nah, haha. I won't do that.

Title: I see no problems. I hear no problems. I smell no problems. I...taste no problems. I'm intrigued, and I'm suspicious.

Summary: Y'all!!!!!!!!

-Y'all!!!!!!!!!!!

-Can you hear my screams?!

- I think I found it guys! This is happening TODAY!

-Okay, this is the most impressive summary I have ever read on Wattpad, besides my own! I'm just kidding about that last part, but everything else is true! Fuck my summary, my summary is complete shit, and now I want to delete it and never look at it ever again because it is unworthy! I think I just climaxed thirteen times during reading this ethereal piece of orgasmic prose and actual fucking PLOT!

-SPITE. ME. B I T C--

-Woah! Calm down....Excuse whatever the he'll that was.

-It's kind of funny how polarizing the tones of the recent reviews are. *Chuckles*

*Crickets*

-Anyway, let me explain why this summary is astounding.

-First of all, it kind of reminds me of the beginning of my old first chapter where I vomit eye-gouging worthy prose, (*Future me whispers* I needed to get a grip) and people kept telling me it would work better as the summary. Now, I finally understand!

-*Holds in tears* this is how you write a summary guys. Please. Fucking. Damn. I'm lost for words.

-The last summary is pretty stellar as well, but it has some issues.

-"Death is an eventuality, But it doesn't have to be an ending." Corny as hell.--Also, there is a simple error with the punctuation/capitalization (mistakenly inserted a comma instead of a period)!--BUT, it's also a perfect way to introduce the reader to the theme (or one of them) of the book.

-The rest of the old summary then went on to introduce an ominous place the book would be getting into in the story, leading us to believe this is going to be the main setting of the book.

-The problem though is that it had only set up the setting and and felt more like a cool premise than anything else. I think the author realized this and decided to whip up the new one. Thank god for that.

-The new version deserves adulation because of the amount of professionalism and sophistication used to eloquently sum up what the story is about. Y'know, what an ideal summary should be. The setting, the conflict, and two main protagonist that have to find a way to get themselves out of their situation, are all given in a well-excited manner. And you know what's the best aspect to this summary?! It comes with an interesting, original plot, and GUESS WHAT?! The summary's allowed to be an actual summary!

*Audience gasps*

-Right?! Scream with me!

-Okay, I may be exaggerating about how good this summary is, but it's the fact that this is a summary I would read on the back of a book at Barnes & Nobles. I'm excited and happy is all.

Plot: I'm about to get dragged! *Wipes mucus*

Opening thoughts: So the opening line isn't the strongest. It's actually a bit disappointing how lackluster it is. However, I'm still interested so not all hope is lost.

-Okay, so someone (not spoiling it) just shot and killed one of the protagonist, and it's a bit melodramatic and heavy-handed. It's lasting longer than I expected and I kind of inwardly cheered when the person shot him another time. Now he can die and the story can start, right? No, no. Of course not!

-Because now I have to wade through a bunch of over-dramatic stumbling, shocked expressions, and slow motion before this character finally stops being annoying and dies. We get it you're flabbergasted, "shooketh to your very core", but having the most slowest death is an over-kill. Ba-dum-tss! (-5)

-I'm not sure if I liked this first chapter, but it doesn't mean other people won't. It's a bit long winded is all. This is a small nit-pick in the grander scheme of things that unfold.

-Okay! I'm in chapter two!

-So this chapter's tone has dropped the melodramatic tone for a monochromatic one. I don't despise it, but it's...odd. But it also fits. So dudebro (Stephen), or should I say deadbro (god), is in this place (which I'm assuming is "The Bounds"). He wakes up thinking that the events from the night prior is only a nightmare. This isn't original, and I've seen it done in dozens of paranormal books, but I'll let this slide because of the execution.

-The chapter has a bit dreamesque aura to it, but also a bit monotone(?). Almost like everything's at a permanent standstill, including the dialogue--even though it is more dialogue-driven and has a consistent presence throughout.

-It (the monotone) can be off putting to some people, but right now I'm liking how eerily casual it feels and that it suits this book.

-I'm sort of impressed.

-Welp, the ending of chapter is a lot more satisfying than expected. I actually want to vote for this chapter. *Various tones of me gasping ensues*

Character:

-Stephen Emerston. He's dead and he's confused--as he should be. All of his emotions (which e displays a wide variety of) are presented realistically and none of it feels forced. He doesn't have a lot of characterization at the moment, but I think I will get some if I read some more. Come back to me.

-Okay, so Stephen is likable enough. He seems very real and human, and god, that's great. It is a rare case when you can find characters like that on Wattpad. When you do, you cherish them with the enormity of your asshole.

-Mostly everything he does seems natural, and I'm loving it. I'm actually starting to feel bad for him as well. That's amazing. Anyway, apparently even though he is dead he can feel pain, and exhaustion. He can also pass through animals, but not inanimate objects (e.g. walls, doors), and he does not float. So, he isn't a cliche, "all-powerful" specter that can do what he wants, but actually has physical barriers all around him. The human world in itself is an obstacle for him, and it's translated beautifully.

-The voice. Favorite character at the moment. I love how nonchalant he is about everything. He's a bit of a morbid character and it would be expected since he is part of this mysterious place. He also seems to be playing the role of Charon of the underworld in Greek mythology (the boatman at the styx river). Hopefully we get more of him! Dear god, who am I? *Grimaces*

-Tom. A guy that Stephen is connected to, and all I know right now is that he has a wife or partner and he is oblivious (*Looks at author*) to his connection with dead-dudebro Stephen.

*Wipes tears* Everything is going too well right now.

Dialogue:

-Best and entertaining dialogue so far. I'm disgusted. I'm actually invested. (-10)

-I don't care! I do what I want! Your losing points out of my own bitterness.

Inconsistencies (if any):

-Stephen for some reason thinks it's a good reason to grab at a hooded guy's leg, he just met, that has knowledge of his death, so this guy must not be human...or he's dead too. But, that doesn't stop him doing something that really seems to have no aim, but to make the character do an action that will further the dialogue. That was ugly, and I noticed. (-3)

-I'm being nit picky here.

Writing Style:

-There's a really nice mix of descriptions, natural and smart(ish) dialogue, and again...professionalism. I can see this being published. I've read a lot of worse books that were published and left me wondering how this went pass any professional editor, let alone get published.

-I hate you.

-Jokes! Just jokes.... *Sneers deeply*

Likes/Dislikes:

-I'm in chapter three. That is a problem. (-3)

-There's this horrible feeling I have that I should continue because I don't think I have a full grasp on what may and can happen in this book....and I want to find out. I almost took a point off, but I wielded myself not to. I'm feeling generous today. Consider yourself lucky.

-I liked when Stephen stuck his finger into one of his bullet wounds into another one. That was nice.

-The originality of this book is so refreshing, I actually want to cry tears of happiness. Bro, I can't even front. This is good.

-The blue string is cool, but I'm sadly confused. I had to read it over multiple times to understand what was going. I think it can be described better. The introduction of it was fine, but once it starts dragging him around it starts to lose me. Or maybe I'm just dumb. It doesn't matter, I'm taking points off. (-3)

Grammar/Punctuation issues (if any, or if they're noticeable to me):

-The grammar is almost perfect. Almost.

-I'm being nit picky here, really, but there's a part where you put slashes instead of commas. It made my eye twitch. 

-Correction: "Do you feel any compassion, sympathy, or connection towards murderers?" (-2)

-Also, you keep putting dashes(-) in the place of em-dashes (-- or—). (-2)

Where you need to improve:

*Crickets*

-There is some punctuation problems in your summary that needs to be fixed? Like some sentences should have ended, but they didn't? But that isn't really something to improve on...you just need to edit it.

*Stares* (-2)

Why/When I stopped reading: I stopped reading at the beginning of chapter four, because I'm selfish and I want to read this without having to write a review anymore. *Sheepishly looks away*

Gummy Bears or Dust: You get...................................

*Dances to Mariah Carey's Fly Away*

Gummy bear homicide!!!! Yay!!!!!

That's not how the murder went down, but I did the best I could.

Anyway, there is no point for a huge paragraph, your books is starting off on a great foot, and I need to go and continue it right now. I gave you a comment, and I will continue to comment on it when I want  and vote for every chapter ever. I'm also fucking following you. FUCK OFF. You're also being added to the BHR's PRL ofc. I swear if your book doesn't get more recognition, I will sue Wattpad. Everyone, please do yourself a favor and read this fucking book! I've read some good books on here, but this is the best one I've reviewed so I will be extra if I want!

READ IT! JUST DO IT!

*Mouth begins to froth with foam*