Reviewer - Vshree_90 vshreee_90

Author - ErsaniSultana ErsaniSultana

Summary: It's a story about Mafia guy Anirudh, who is cruel, kidnaps a girl Ershaani, and forces himself on her.

Personal experience: It needs a lot of editing. Though the author has already informed the readers that, English is not her first language, which is good. I would suggest the author use the Grammarly app which would help a lot. Many Punctuation marks, spelling mistakes can be avoided. If possible avoid Whatsapp language while typing, as it's a great turn-off for readers.

It's impressive that the author chose this dark romance genre to write as her first story. The author needs more time to learn to write as a writer of a book.

Coming to the story, it looks promising, but Anirudh's character fails to leave an impression. Instead of coming out as a cruel Mafia, he's acting like a horny teenager who has started watching adult movies for the first time. The story is not moving forward. For me, it felt like there was just more of the same stuff that we'd seen in the previous two chapters. This is making the story very predictable instead of creating curiosity among readers. It would be better if the author writes from the narrator's point of view so that the story will be more approachable. While writing Anirudh's POV and Ershaani's Pov she is mixing her POV too which is very confusing.

There are some surprise elements in the story which can't be revealed here. For that, you guys have to read the story.

Opinion: I would say that the author needs to work on the plot of the story a lot. There is a scope for improvement. There are lots of Mafia stories on the same theme. Every story has its uniqueness. The author has to figure out what makes this story unique. Once it's done, the story will itself grab the attention of readers. As a reader, I'm hoping the story progresses and shows the real plot of the story.

Special Note To Author: You are a strong girl. There is nothing wrong when you make mistakes. I came to know that someone reported your story. Screw them. Some will support your work, some will report your work. Don't let some negative people define your value. Always, remember, "When everything seems to be going against you, remember that the airplane takes off against the wind, not with it." --Henry Ford