Hello Yummychocochick!! I've read the first 10 chapters of the book and here are my thoughts.

First impressions:

Title: I really liked the name Leonardo when I first saw it; however the story isn't really about Leonardo it's about Xanthos, which makes it a bit confusing. However, I like it.

Rating: 8/10

Cover: I like the cover, I feel like it's well made and an effort was put in it so, well done.

Rating: 10/10

Summary: You said to "Join the journey of Leonardo" It's not Leonardo's story, yes I understand that Xanthos is the reincarnation of Leonardo but its still not Leo's story.

Rating: 5/10

Technical Issues:

Grammar: You have a lot of grammar and sentence structure mistakes.

Some examples:

Prologue:

"You know who am I right?"-----> "Who I am right?"

"Want this negotiation to stay a negotiation"---> "this negotiation to stay as is"

"He saw her with admiration"---> "He looked at her with admiration"

"He wanted her to always stay content but he knew it didn't happen"---> "but he knew it's not possible" or "couldn't happen"

"I am going to pleasure you"---> "Please you"

"Though you are telling me to not worry I know that even you are worried too"---> "Although you're telling me not to worry, I know that deep inside you, you're as worried as I am"

"Draco asked in a mockingly."----> "Asked mockingly" or, "asked in a mocking way or tone"

"We have some surprise for both of you"--> "Some surprises" or "A surprise"

Chapters:

"I will make today's day to be a memorable for you"--> "I will make today a very memorable day for you"

"Our chest was almost touching each other"--> "Our chests were almost touching."

"His eyes widen as if he just was just reminded"---> "His eyes widened in shock"

"I look at the time at my broken wristwatch which was sitting on the nightstand beside my bed which was made of cardboard"---> "I looked at the time in my broken wristwatch which was seated on the nightstand beside my bed made of cardboard."

"Tell me bitch you were holding a huge party at my house"--> "Tell me, bitch, did you hold a huge party in my house?"

"She started kicking me on my stomach and I am sure my rib bones are damaged"--> " she started kicking me in my stomach, and I was sure that my rib bones were damaged"

"And by many people, its a very nice place"---> "According to many people, its a very nice place"

"I shook my head indicating that even I was happy"---> "I nodded my head indicating that I was happy"

"Even I wanted a hug. Even I wanted someone to reassure...Even I wanted someone who will protect..."----> "I wanted a hug, I wanted someone to reassure...I wanted someone who will protect."

"When the door was fully opened I felt my"--> "When the door fully opened.."

"Look at me in my eyes when you are supposed to"---> "Look me in the eyes when you're supposed to"

"Do you know a bitch when I went to your school"--- "Do you know bitch, when I went to your school"

"He faces palmed himself"--> "He face palmed." Or "He palmed his face"

"How would you know what was I going to tell you"--> "What I was going to tell you"
"Compared you, a useless eccentric bitch with my son"--> "to my son"

"When I looked up I saw Lewis. He has a mocking sadness look on his face."--> "When I looked up I saw Lewis who had a mockingly sad look on his face"

"I am your superman isn't it"--> "I'm your superman, aren't I?" Or "Am I not your superman"

"Yay! Even I have calculus too"---> "Yay! I have calculus too"

"If anyone will not submit then.."--> "If anyone doesn't submit by then..."

"Class dismiss"---> "Class dismissed"

"I'm a bad liar, isn't it?"---> "Arent I?"

Rating: 4/10

Spelling: In the prologue, there's a part where he says "I'm very lucky to have you has my queen" it should be "As my queen"

"Let my guess about the topic of our discussion"--> "Let me guess"

"Showed me the locked passport"--> "Password? Or passcode"

"Which period do you have"---> "Which Course or Subject"

Rating: 7/10

Punctuation: You have a lot of punctuation mistakes, you use an insane amount of full stops. I took some screenshots of some parts or examples.

Rating: 3/10

More technical issues:
🌟 "No add a new word old in between" (That's a sentence in one of the chapters, but I have no idea what it meant)

🌟Excess use of "Even" in a lot of wrong places in the sentence and for wrong functions

The Heart of The Book:

Characters: I like the characters, I really root for Bella, and it really hurts to see her go through all this.

Lewis, was a good evil guy that transformed into a good one HOWEVER, the shift from evil to good confused me, cause I didn't get why this would change his idea of Bella.

Xanthos is a really nice name, and I like his character.

Luciano, I don't know where he came from honestly, I don't know, it confuses me. Is he like the same Luciano who was friends with Leonardo? I don't know.

I like how Angelo's name is Ironic cause she has nothing to do with Angels or Kindness or anything but it should be womanly.

Rating: 7/10

Conflict: Haven't really seen a conflict aside from the war waged against Leonardo in the prologue and the conflict between Bella and her family. I think there needs to be more action into it or more inner conflict for example (which is there) but not too obvious.

Rating: 8.5/10

Pace: It's a good pace, in my opinion, I like it.

Rating: 10/10

Emotions: She's an emotional character, but she needs to act more than explain. Let her move her hands through the bruises, let her act numb (like she got used to what happens to her from the family), stuff like that.

Rating: 8.5/10

Chapter Endings: I really like your chapter endings, I felt hooked to the book which is always awesome.

Rating: 9.5/10

Logic: There are 2 parts that really made me question where the logic is..

The first part was the contradiction that Bella showed after her stepmom beat her, she was like her face was bruised, then later in the same page says they don't bruise her in places that are visible so they'd protect their image. So, why is her face bruised?

The second part was the Luciano part, usually the first thing that happens when you see a wolf is running, because they are terrifying. However, Bella just casually stood there telling a wolf she plays ninja-something and communicated with a wolf, no screaming, no worry, no fear... That was pretty illogical to me.

Rating: 8/10

Suggestions/Compliments:

-Stop using "even" in all the sentences.

-Angelo is a guy name so I suggest changing it to like "Angela" or "Angelica"

-Please use more commas and semi-colons

-Focus more on acting the emotions instead of explaining them

-Focus on making stuff logical although it is a werewolf story, they have rules too.

-Well done on the pace, it's really good.

-The prologue was amazing, it gave me vibes of a "different" werewolf story but then it kind of hit me when I knew it wasn't going to be like that. To be honest with you, I had the thought that now Leonardo is going to look for a new mate and I kept debating how that is possible and stuff, but then you introduced new people which was pretty confusing.

-Download "Grammarly keyboard" to help with spelling and grammar mistakes, it could really come in handy sometimes.