ChocolateBrownie22

First Impression: cute plot!

I have to say, I really love this book. It's so well written, and you have great vocabulary. I love the plot development, and everything that happens in what I read makes sense. You have a great beginning, and I like how the idea of "remembering a memory." You also have very vivid descriptions and imagery, and I would definitely continue reading this story. I like the length of the chapters because they are short, but full of information and straight to the point. This allows the story to move at a great pace. I really like Emma and Boston's relationship as it develops, because of how cute they are, and I also love their comebacks and witty banter. I really like the humor in this story, because I found myself laughing throughout the chapters. I love your writing style, and I can't wait to read more. The only thing I would suggest to change is the verb tense, especially in Chapter 1. This example, "It's the last day of school, senior year," is in present tense. However, the next sentence "The last bell rang, the last high school..." is in past tense. I suggest to keep it all in one tense. Overall, I really, truly enjoyed this story!

Remember that these suggestions are just my opinion, and this is your story, so make sure to write it the way you want it to be! If you don't agree with any of my suggestions, then ignore them :)

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- bluecrayonlady