DestinyWelsh

First Impression: that's a very dark cover

Plot wise, I really enjoy how it's structured. You have an interesting start, and pretty good pacing. The pacing does get kind of slow in the middle, and there are some parts that are abrupt, or choppy. I like the dark and tense mood you paint with words, and you also have very detailed descriptions. I can definitely see the characterization throughout the book. There are many verb tense and grammar issues, so when editing, make sure to go back and fix them. I also though that the part with Jason in chapter 1 was awkward placed and also abrupt and just excessive. Some chapters are so long, that they kind of boring to read. And also, the fact that Zane and Aurora love each other so fast came really abruptly, because we don't know about the whole soul mates thing. I would suggest just altering that part so it flows better.

Remember that these suggestions are just my opinion and this is your story, so make sure to write it the way you want it to be. If you don't agree with my suggestions, then ignore them :)

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- bluecrayonlady