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First Impression: love the cover!

This is a really great plot! You have a really interesting start, and I like how we are introduced to the plot and action immediately. This way, readers don't get bored. I also like that cliffhanger at the end of Chapter 2. Watch out for verb tense and spelling. Also, it seemed a little out of the blue the way the girls just started hurting her. Maybe give some background information on who they are, what they have against the main character, etc. I would also love to see more physical descriptions of what each character looks like, and also tell us the basic information, like age. 

Remember that these suggestions are just my opinion, and this is your story, so make sure to write it the way you want it to be! If you don't agree with any of my suggestions, then ignore them :)

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- bluecrayonlady