@NatiYsha

First Impression: Is this a story about sharks, the animals? haha...

Amazing job on this story! I really love how your plot is very unique and different. I don't think I've ever read a book like this! It's so cool how you have these 3 girls who meet these 3 guys, and it's hilarious to see them interact with each other. You have great details in describing everyone and everything, which really helps the reader imagine the scene in their heads. I also think it's amazing that the Sharks are respected in the school, and instead of being the stereotypical "popular" people, they are kind and help defend those who are weaker. Your story is hilarious, especially when they first meet each other. However, sometimes I'm a little confused because of how the story is formatted. For example, the transitions are a little awkward and choppy, and it doesn't flow as well as I think it should. I do think it's pretty cool that you have the characters' names in bold when they are speaking, but sometimes it's confusing, especially with so many characters. One major thing is verb tense. I know a lot of people struggle with this; I struggle with this. It's hard to stay in one tense when you are writing, but it takes practice and some editing. Also, there are some grammar and spelling mistakes, but these are an easy fix. Keep up the great work! 

Remember that these suggestions are just my opinion, and this is your story, so you should write it the way you want it to be. If you don't agree with any of these suggestions, then ignore them :)

- bluecrayonlady