ClairEwritesBooks

First Impression: I love the cover!

This is a really cool plot, and I really enjoyed what is posted so far. You have an action filled start, really capturing the attention of the reader, especially with that gruesome ending. There are amazing descriptions, and the story as a whole moves at a perfect pace; not too fast and not too slow. You also characterize Lara and James very well, and I know who they are as people. You're also good at showing the emotions of each character, because I can feel the hopelessness Lara feels. I love both the characters you have created because they are so relatable and well rounded. This is a really well written story altogether, and I'm looking forward to more. I do have a question: What year is it in this story? Also, I would love to see more description of her life on Earth, because it does seem to be different from the Earth we know today. Great work! 

Remember that these suggestions are just my opinion, and this is your story, so make sure to write it the way you want it to be! If you don't agree with any of my suggestions, ignore them :)

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