nocturnal_sami

First Impression: love the cover!

Since there's only one chapter up, the only thing I have to say is that you have a great start, especially with introducing what will come in future chapters. Make sure to watch your verb tense. 

Remember that these suggestions are just my opinion, and this is your story, so make sure to write it the way you want it to be! If you don't agree with any of my suggestions, ignore them :)

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- bluecrayonlady