RecklessHurricane

First Impression: nice cover!

This story is really well written. I love how it's short and sweet, and it doesn't move too fast or too slow. I like that it's a mini story, and everything flows nicely. You go through the rising action, the climax, and the falling action perfectly so that it doesn't feel rushed. I also like how it's a cute little story. I do have some questions. As I was reading, I eventually figured out that Jordan is her boyfriend, but I couldn't figure out who Sam is. I would suggest making it clear who Sam is in the story. Great work!

Remember that these suggestions are just my opinion, and this is your story, so make sure to write it the way you want it to be! If you don't agree with any of my suggestions, then ignore them :)

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- bluecrayonlady