KatieWeasley394

First Impression: that is a very long title

I just keep getting more and more impressed with each one of your stories. They're amazing. You have a great writing style, everything flows nicely, and grammar is usually perfect. In this story, you have a great start, it really hooks the reader in. Also, you have amazing descriptions, which I've probably said before. There's great character development, and I can feel all the emotions the characters are feeling. I also got chills when I was reading "Young Blood Part 1." I'm very confused about this whole paradox and time travelling thing, but I think that's just me. Continue doing what you're doing now, and you're good! You're off to a great start, so keep up the amazing work!

Remember that these suggestions are just my opinion, and this is your story, so make sure to write it the way you want it to be! If you don't agree with any of my suggestions, then ignore them :)

- bluecrayonlady