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First Impression: cool plot! love the cover, too!

What you have so far is amazing! You have a great start in the prologue, captivating the audience with the action filled chapter. Everything is so suspenseful, especially since you start with a kidnapping. I also love the change of point of views because it gives the reader insight on all sides of the story. Sometimes, the changing of the point of view is a little confusing, because I'm not sure who is talking, but after reading on, I can usually tell whose point of view it's in. The story is very well written, and moves at a good pace; not too slow, and not to fast. You have great descriptions and imagery, allowing me to imagine everything in my head. I would suggest for you to work on developing your characters more, and shaping them as you progress on. SHOW us who they are, their personalities, and make them realistic. Also, you tend to begin your sentences with "I," so I would watch out for sentence variety, and change it up a little. I love how you have the point of view of the previous pair of soulmates, because we get information from the past and the present. Great work!

Remember that these suggestions are just my opinion, and this is your story, so make sure to write it the way you want it to be! If you don't agree with any of my suggestions, then ignore them :)

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