da_homosapiensapien

First Impression: how is this plot even going to work??

Wow. Just wow. I'm basically speechless at this point. What can I even say? I mean, this story is so well-written, and I enjoyed it, even though it contains the thoughts of a serial killer. This plot is so interesting and unique, and I don't think anyone's ever written something like this. You have amazing descriptions, and incredible characterization, showing us who Haemo is. Through the diary entries, we get an insightful look on Haemo, and we also get a different source from the newspaper clippings. You have amazing vocabulary, which really adds the "spice" to the story. I love how you gradually unravel the story and add in small pieces of his past slowly. I also like how the entries are short, but full of useful information. Some stories drag out their chapters that it just becomes painful to read. But these chapters are short and get the point across. Kind of like how Haemo kills :P It's so amazing that you portray him as a normal person, but inside his brain, he's so different from others. You also have great details. I just wanted to know, do you write one diary entry every day? So the date is exact? And also, what do you mean by Haemo's "day person" ? There are some spelling and grammar mistakes, but those can be fixed easily. Great work!

Remember that these suggestions are just my opinion, and this is your story, so make sure to write it the way you want it to be! If you don't agree with any of my suggestions, then ignore them :)

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- bluecrayonlady