Absolutely_Positive

First Impression: I don't usually read anime stories, but since you checked out my stories, I read it. 

Since I don't know anything about this anime, I was a little confused throughout the whole thing, especially in scenes that included any information needed to know before hand. However, you have a great start, and amazing descriptions, and this would be a really cool story plot without the anime. It's really well written, and you capture the characterization well. I just got really confused with all the different characters and different names. There's definitely lots of humor involved in this story. I found it weird that there was no background information on the character, but then I realized that this was an anime story, so I guess you need to know the information before you read the story? There are many spelling mistakes, so make sure to fix those when editing. What I'm worried about is when this story will end. There doesn't seem to be a big conflict, because the main character could just continue being Chou for a long time. 

Remember that these suggestions are just my opinion, and this is your story, so make sure to write it the way you want it to be. If you don't agree with any of my suggestions, then ignore them :)

Payment: story reads (accepted) 

- bluecrayonlady