DannatoDestinato

First Impression: This seems like a really cool plot!

At first, I was confused on what the first chapter had to do with the whole story, and then when you gradually brought in the magical world, I finally understood. This is a really well written story, and I really enjoyed it. You are absolutely amazing at conveying emotions, and I feel like I can be Catherine because I know exactly how she is feeling all the time, from the death of Jonathan to receiving the news of her being a Keeper. You also have amazing descriptions, which is very much needed for a story like this, because we don't know anything about the magical world. You also have amazing characterization, and each character is so realistic that I feel like they are real people. I also like how Catherine is confused, and learning all these pieces of information, and we are learning with her, so it's like we are the main character. I really love this plot idea, very imaginative! One thing I would say is to do some editing when you are finished with the story to catch the little mistakes and also fix some of the sentence formatting/structure. Also, some parts are a little slow, but that is understandable since you need to elaborate on the whole magical world. I just have one question. Is there a difference between the spelling of "valcyrie" and "valkyrie" ?

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