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First Impression: I love the title! 

You are an amazing writer, let me just get that out there. You have amazing descriptions, and great word choice, which really shows me that you have a great writing style. I love how you are able to describe every moment, and I feel like I'm actually there. Especially the chapter at the party, when Zeke is trying to take the picture of the girl, I actually feel as if I'm there with him, and I can feel his frustration, which means you are great at conveying emotions as well. You have great characterization, and I can really tell what Zeke's personality is and what Theo's personality is. I feel like they are real people, and I feel that I know them very well. There's some humor tied into the story, which is great. Some parts made me laugh! I can't wait to see where this story will continue to, especially since I think Zeke and Theo's relationship is so cute! One thing, I don't know if I'm just slow, or maybe it's because of the fact that I didn't read the summary, but I thought Theo was also a guy at first. In the beginning chapters, it just felt like Theo was a guy, and doesn't sound like she is a girl. Also, I don't know if I missed this, but is Theo the girl Zeke was trying to photograph at the party? 

Remember that these suggestions are just my opinion, and this is your story, so make sure to write it the way you want it to be! If you don't agree with any of my suggestions, then ignore them :)

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- bluecrayonlady