angel_0v0_lee

First Impression: Nice cover!

This is a really well written story! I love how in the prologue, you introduce the conflict to us, especially the internal battle Alex faces. You give a lot of insight of what is going on in her brain, and what she is thinking about. You also add in snippets of her past, which is really good, because it intrigues the reader and lets them want to continue reading. Also, you have great descriptions of everything, especially physical appearances. I also love how you have great characterization, where you are able to show what kind of person Alex is through the way he (or she) talks. It shows how much he's gone through his whole life. This is a really great and unique plot, and it's really awesome to see your imagination come into play. I also loved the cliffhanger in the first chapter! One thing I found was that some parts were a little confusing, or some parts were a little slow. Those are just minor details, and can be fixed after reading over the story for future drafts. Great work!

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