alexan629

First Impression: love the mysterious feel of the cover!

Since you've just started this story and there are only a few chapters, there isn't much to say. I think the story is moving at a decent pace, especially since you give four prologues in the different points of views. I really like the idea of this story, and the idea of having four characters. Through each POV, you give us insight on who they are, and we really get to know them as a person, and not just words on a page. You have great descriptions and imagery, because I can really imagine everything in my head, like the destruction and fire burning. You had me on the edge of seat, wanting to read on. I also love your wide range of vocabulary. It shows the character of the book, and really adds to the whole feel of the book. One suggestion I have is to capitalize the letter "D" in Darkness, since you tend to write "the darkness" and I think it would be really cool to capitalize it. I was confused when I finished reading Part I, but then in your author's notes, you explained that it's okay to feel confused, so I was like, "oh! ok good lol" Overall, Great work!

Remember that these suggestions are just my opinion, and this is your story, so make sure to write it the way you want it to be! If you don't agree with any of my suggestions then ignore them :) 

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