BlissfulQueens

First Impression: simple cover!

Great story! I like how you show us that Naga and Tyler are orphans, instead of telling us, but I would like to have more background on who Naga is before she loses her memory. Also, it would be nice to have some more characterization, to show us who each character is, their personalities. Make us, the readers, be able to get to know your characters. You have great descriptions of the setting, which I can imagine in my head, but everything happens so fast and I end up being confused through the third chapter. I don't know if you will resolve everything in future chapters, but since there are only three chapters, I'm left confused. I love the use of the cliffhanger in the third chapter! 

Remember that these suggestions are just my opinion, and this is your story, so make sure to write it the way you want it to be! If you don't agree with any of my suggestions, then ignore them :)

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- bluecrayonlady