@Sarah_Toussaint

First Impression: Loving the font of the cover! But I can't really see the author's name part :| 

You did a really great job taking a cliche story line and making it your own! I found the cliche parts pretty quickly; the two main characters having a deep hatred for each other but end up falling for each other. However, you definitely put your own twist on it, especially with those hilarious pranks! Your beginning is very well written because you describe the situation: what happened in the past and then switching over to what is happening now. You give insight on the main character's life and the environment she grew up in, which gives a lot of character description. One of my favorite parts was how Jessie loves onions! Another positive was that you have character development, because you showed Jessie as a shy, timid girl in the beginning, and then portrayed her as someone confident and proud. One thing was that this transition from shy to confident was a little too abrupt in my opinion. All of a sudden, I, as the reader is told that Jessie is now hot, confident, and popular. For me, this was a little choppy, and it could have been smoother in terms of the transition. Of course, you have great descriptions of each character, and you use cliffhangers well. I love the humor in this story, especially since it made me laugh a couple times. Naturally, there are some grammar, spelling, and structural issues, but those can be fixed easily. Great job so far on your story, and I can't wait to read more! 

Remember that these suggestions are my opinion, and this is your story, so make sure to write it the way you want it to be, especially if you don't agree with my suggestions! 

- bluecrayonlady