KatieWeasley394

First Impression: I really like the cover! Can't really see the title though :/ 

This is a really well-written story! I was so intrigued by everything, and I couldn't stop reading! I was so sad when it said "To be Continued" at the end. I can't wait to see how the story progresses. You have great sentence variety and sentence structure, and everything flows very nicely. Your writing style is amazing and easy to understand. I also love the story line, especially with the whole movie set situation. I truly enjoyed this story, and I can't wait to read more. There are some spelling errors, but those can be fixed easily when editing. Also make sure to stay in the same verb tense when talking about the same situation. I also think you could use more character description, such as the background of the main characters. SHOW us who they are, and let us get to know them on a personal level. Make us feel like we can connect and relate to them. Overall, great job! 

Remember that these suggestions are just my opinion and this is your story, so make sure to write it the way you want it to be! If you don't agree with any of my suggestions, then ignore them :)

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