Zdolphin5

First Impression: Simple cover!

I absolutely love this plot. It's so unique, captivating, and intriguing. The whole time I'm reading, I'm on the edge of my seat, wanting to read on and learn more. I saw the plot twist at the end, and I thought to myself: this story needs to continue, because I need to read on. You have great descriptions of the setting and all the characters. The only thing I'm worried about is that there are a lot of characters. So far, you are doing well just balancing the characters to a few of them. But since there are 26 letters of the alphabet, some characters will just "disappear" from the story, meaning you probably won't mention them in future chapters. However, if you keep continuing what you are doing now, by just focusing on some characters, then there will be room for character development, and I hope to see that in future chapters. I also love that plot twist. I'm thinking that maybe Adam and Ally are destined to be together? I seriously got the chills when I read the last sentence about the Southern Islands. I was completely awestruck and amazed, because I definitely did not see that coming. There are some run on sentences and spelling errors, but those are minor. I can't wait to see where this story will go! 

Remember that these suggestions are just my opinion, and this is your story, so make sure to write it the way you want it to be! If you don't agree with any of my suggestions, then ignore them :) 

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- bluecrayonlady